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Do you think Hollywood welcomes? OR THEY Will Think it is not good enough and doesn't deserve.



------- GG

George aka GG is an ordinary British man who works as an accountant in an international firm in India and UK. He travels with his family between two countries. GG has a white freckly daughter who is smart enough to remember the story and tell us later. She helps her parents with her unbelievable skills.
While job of GG is not easy to do, he devotes himself to it without problem. His every day is work, work, and work. Of course, it doesn’t hurt his family; they know he does it for goodness of all of them.
Benjamin is a black young ambitious tailor who works in his office in central Delhi. He has plans for his future. Success in job for him means making fashionable new cloths that people dare to pay a lot to buy.
But how Benjamin gets to know GG? One day Benjamin was working in his office and was tired that incidentally got to see a shrunk man on top of his working table. It was a moment to fear. How did he accept the reality? He didn’t, at beginning, he was totally lost. He just fainted for seeing him and after it he was escaping from the shrunk GG. Whether GG was hidden in a coat or he found a way to settle there, Benjamin had to believe he now relates to a story nobody will believe. Maybe it was easier to believe it is a dream than believing not, but why didn’t it get to an end?
Benjamin soon understands that GG was one of his customers who recently gave him a fabric to sew. But Benjamin doesn’t have a good memory, unlike GG’s daughter, Angelica, who is very good memory.
Angelica finds that her mom is very upset and she should do something. Father didn’t come back. Her family calls police, but police did not do anything after about two weeks. She knows her father is not without enemies. The evil people who are in battle with a good accountant are nothing unusual in corrupted old timer India. Mr Shrimp and his dirty subordinate fellows do whatever to keep their wrong jobs secret to others. After two weeks police looked everywhere and inspected every suspect. She knew those evil men did it, but didn’t know how they persuaded police that they didn’t kidnap him, nor know where he is. Maybe it was true, and she was looking in a wrong place. She told herself “Daddy is probably not kidnapped, she is probably lost”. But was it possible? She finds no response; she calls a friend of dad and wants him to want the police search for him again. She knows that there are some people who hate daddy, because he does his job righteously. The father’s friend soon understands that her daddy is shrunk, but can’t tell her. He says something happened that now your father is lost. After requesting more, he tells your daddy is shrunk and can be everywhere.
Angelica likes her father a lot. She does know the police is incapable and can’t do anything. So, she and another teen friend Arjun go to where she thinks daddy went that day. That’s the place she thinks they will find her father. She wants him to go along with him before anyone understands it. They get to there, the office of Benjamin Tailor, but he doesn’t trust them and doesn’t tell the reality. His emphases on not allowing them to look for their lost watch makes them think the father is surely in there and he knows it.
They wait for him to leave office, but he doesn’t until mid-night, when there is really dark and they fear in loneliness.
He comes and then opens the door, her father didn’t like them to see him in that condition, because didn’t know what happens when she sees him so, but seeing very dark night becomes a reason they accepted it.
The next day morning, they begin to think what to do. While none of them except Arjun are India’s native, Benjamin says that he has a good friend who is well aware of tradition of India; he may know how they should act.
They call him, and he has to come from another city. But since it is emergency, he promises to arrive soon. In his way to that city, he encounters some robbers, but it passes luckily.
Meanwhile, they ate some mango and the remaining of it with some half and some unused exist. One mouse is there and will escape. Benjamin turns on a light and gets a glass of water and while walking talks about last week’s attempt to buy an American cigarettes and that could not buy him happiness, because there were total 20 mice in the street he counted them. Or maybe 19 or 18. He says that the point is that nobody can count the mice in the city, even if one has a good math skill. “Not me, not you, that’s shit”: he says.
Then Angelica after a while says she has to go to toilet and then goes quickly. Suddenly, the weather changes dramatically and it will be rainy after wind and being cloudy when she is not there. And they get ready for new weather.
One knocks the door, GG hides, and Benjamin goes to doorstep and sees from hole that it is his friend who is wet with three chickens with hen (the mother) and a little duck there. Then, Benjamin says he knows that he is a pro-animals-right that follows the mother for the chickens kilometers, and hardly he won’t find it. Can you tell my little friends … who is this? Who? Me? No… no, this duck? She was alone, so…. Does it matter to you? Benjamin answers Not really, of course, your animal friends have no place inside, they should pass the night out.
Benjamin says that we have a special case here, and that I didn’t want to say suddenly, but we have a friend here, of course now he is shrunk. We expect you to help him come back to his own size.
He says he doesn’t get surprised, because when you call him, it should be a special case. But they called the wrong person, because he knows little about it. For finding someone who can really help, they should go to the south, or they have to own lots of money to make one of them come here. Of course, in both cases, that happens hardly, they fear to continue their works after Great Britain’s govt in India forbad their working.
He says there is another way, too, that could be better. We wait for a few weeks until one of them are seen in the city; they usually come for visiting the old temple.
They accept and he says deliver it to him and he will take care of that. It is not true to kill their trusts.
He then changes cloths of himself & goes.
Then camera comes down & shows one underground room in whose water dropping. In there, there are a lot of documents, stuffs, bed & it is evident it is empty now temporary. *One cigarette is still lit.
The Benjamin’s friend left and they are without him in the room. But suddenly, one rings/knocks. Benjamin goes to see from door’s hole, and sees it is his friend comes back. It is him and maybe forgot something. But when Benjamin’s friend opens the door, it is a Chinese baby, and Benjamin what is this? He says doesn’t know, he did nothing wrong, just read. It is written “We have to, Mommy and Daddy”. While they are thinking what to do for this new problem, one man is shown who has a rope in his hand and they close a man around fire and they beat him to confess if that lost money is all others understood or there are more things leaked; and if he knows place of those documents or not. Two boys are shown later who secretly see the scene and regret.
Then Britain’s princess behind a horse in a cart comes to the scene. Tells something shortly and then goes. *One receives the message and sends to the appropriate person ie Mr Shrimp.
After two weeks, the news comes that the friend of Benjamin who wanted to help is killed. Now, they have to go to the rural region in southern India, it is a hard travel, they give the Chinese child to police and travel through a long way to there and find out that they don’t accept to see non-Indian people. They had a female translator who was their tour-leader, and she accepts to pay for it some money to them and get the secret solution. She brings the answer, and says they said they can provide them with it if they pay more money. They get happy, but the one decides to escape, they understand and catch him and he gives them the drug (tears of female crocodile). He says can no longer live there, because those who did it to him will come to look for the one who gave them drug. He goes.
Then the battle between those enemies with GG and friends starts.
It is season of rain. Some from Britain come and GG will be chosen as the responsible for finding the corruption clues. Indian Police arrests the subordinate follows who were Indian. The British Police arrests Mr Shrimp. The news about partnership of a princess gets cracked down, but that will remain as a dirty point for royal family. 60 years pass and Angelica tells the story to her grandchildren in India.

------- For link to more, pm me,

I had other ideas, too.. I changed name of Rafael to Lautaro. If you want link to them, pm me..


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mussonman said: If you want to write, keep writing. Every writer you admire started out in the same position as you.
I agree.

nobody said: I think I need to stop writing, because I did my best... I can't improve, I am just this.. It needs resources which I should have and don't have. I am not about talent, so, give up is my decision..
Did you tell your story to people you know? If they like your story you should just write it in your language. If they don't like the story, learn how to write a better story. Find a book in your language that will teach you. Take a class. Find a way to learn. It all depends how much you really want to. If you give up, then you don't really want to.
 
I agree.


Did you tell your story to people you know? If they like your story you should just write it in your language. If they don't like the story, learn how to write a better story. Find a book in your language that will teach you. Take a class. Find a way to learn. It all depends how much you really want to. If you give up, then you don't really want to.

I try to find someone Persian who is fluent in English to rewrite/correct. This is in fact very visual screenplay, I don't think it is so bad. Maybe others DON'T understand my English or the screenplay is hard to grasp for others?!!
Anyways, I have another story too. Called it Rafael before, it is something Spanish History...... It is easier to understand.

The link to Rafael:

https://drive.google.com/open?id=0BxbVfiVFJyhAUV9nRVhPbFdwYUk





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Hollywood welcomes noone.

I don't think it's a good idea, but that doesn't mean you should give up screenwriting. It means you should work hard to IMPROVE. Talent doesn't exist, there is only skill

No... there are 2 tings that no mater how hard you work will not improve. In screenwriting this is creativity and IQ.

Jordan Peterson explains this better.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pKZYS3fFTc8

Talent does exist. The best Marathon runners are all from Kenya... there leg structure and low body weight makes them Ideal. The best Chess gamer's have a high IQ and the best firing consultants are low on Empathy and large in assertiveness.
 
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Do you think Michael Jordan was just born magically good at basketball?
Yes I do. He worked hard, but he had a natural talent for it. Read or listen
to people who knew him as a little boy - they ALL say he had had an innate,
born talent when he picked up a basketball.

There is no such thing as talent. To say people just are or aren't good at things, and can't improve is a slap in the face to anyone who has ever achieved anything.
I don't believe that for a moment. People who are just good at things is
not a slap in the face to anyone. And NO ONE here said you can't improve.
You added that to make a very poor point. Everyone can improve. That
doesn't mean that there is no such thing as talent.
 
there are 2 tings that no mater how hard you work will not improve. In screenwriting this is creativity and IQ.
Well you can improve IQ & I think you can also improve your creativity. There are techniques that can open your way of thinking in new maybe unfamiliar ways. People who don't seem to be able to think creatively can learn how, it's just harder to start when you're old. It's easier to learn at a young age. Just like any activity, the more you work at it, & the more you do it, the better you become.
 
Well you can improve IQ & I think you can also improve your creativity. There are techniques that can open your way of thinking in new maybe unfamiliar ways. People who don't seem to be able to think creatively can learn how, it's just harder to start when you're old. It's easier to learn at a young age. Just like any activity, the more you work at it, & the more you do it, the better you become.

Yes there are things you can do to improve your IQ... brain training and making complex puzzles ... I don't think you can bring a 100 to a 160. (Lets cal this a talent) Can people learn to be creative? I think people that want to be creative can develop it if the have it to begin with. Not all people that have a talent will use it or have a desire to develop it. There are a lot of people that have a penis of 35cm that don"t want to become a porn star or have a good physique to become a professional dancer... I think the people that learn to be creative have the desire and potential to be creative. Me for example started at a very old age (24) in art school.
 
What I did was with zero study. But what I wrote were not unknown. I think IF IT WAS GOOD, It could be a sign of talent. I agree skill is not %100 talent, but I think that it is not good to say all people are the same, though, many people can be surprising at stages. I think continuous success is more important.
Unfortunately, what I think are not bad are not understood by people here. Probably my English way of writing should be improved. Or anything.....


Someone needs to read my links instead of trying to talk on if talent exists......


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Hey you started the talent talk by saying you quit.

You did that on purpose, that was one of those Facebook-like statuses craving attention. :P
 
Hey you started the talent talk by saying you quit.

You did that on purpose, that was one of those Facebook-like statuses craving attention. :P

I think one got too much attention with this sort of dialogue, he said IT IS NOT GOOD, period. I think more people should say their opinions. I did 20 pages for Rafael and 8 pages of GG. Rafael CAN BE BETTER, I didn't do my best there, I started with thinking on how hollywood can do better... Anyways, hollywood doesn't always do its best, too, though, it tries to be always new, even when it copies, it is the metric for new people....
Though, maybe I am not well at saying what hollywood does or does not.. ;)


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Sometimes you have to write for yourself. If you KNOW it is good, then stand behind it. Nirvana didn't write songs, and ask a bunch of people "Do you think this is good?" In fact they even got panned by Rolling Stone and written off by many a critic. If this is your passion, you soldier on, and create, even if it is for yourself, hoping others will enjoy your vision... and when they do, that is the reward!
 
Sometimes you have to write for yourself. If you KNOW it is good, then stand behind it. Nirvana didn't write songs, and ask a bunch of people "Do you think this is good?" In fact they even got panned by Rolling Stone and written off by many a critic. If this is your passion, you soldier on, and create, even if it is for yourself, hoping others will enjoy your vision... and when they do, that is the reward!

I agree, because I compare and love what I did. I think I can do with lower budget, OR hope one big director at last love. I can improve by writing.. Even in your saying if it is for myself...


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Read or listen
to people who knew him as a little boy - they ALL say he had had an innate,
born talent when he picked up a basketball.

Ask the people who knew Michael Jordan - they will tell you how much he played it, CONSTANTLY. The others might hold that mystical "he was born to play it" belief, but their testimony doesn't mean squat against cold, hard reality. Do you honestly believe that he was as good as a child as he was today?

What about the fact that he didn't make the Varsity team and spent an entire summer with that chip on his shoulder, constantly working out AND practicing basketball? "He's just good. Aint nuttin' to it" (read that in a high-pitched hillbilly voice, for comedic effect)

And NO ONE here said you can't improve.
You added that to make a very poor point.

Reread the thread then. You are wrong about that. You're also wrong about it being a poor point (unless of course you don't want people to improve their skills)


People who are just good at things is
not a slap in the face to anyone

No, I said THE BELIEF that they are 'just good at things' is a slap in the face to their achievements (re-read.)

They all worked hard. The closest thing to reality that your belief in talent has, is being born with the right genetics or opportunities that give one a slight advantage in some field. But I doubt even you would argue that it's the same as talent.
 
No... there are 2 tings that no mater how hard you work will not improve. In screenwriting this is creativity and IQ.

So you're saying it's impossible to improve your IQ or your creativity. Gotcha. Well, do a little research on how to do exactly those two things if you'd like to improve.



Talent does exist. The best Marathon runners are all from Kenya... there leg structure and low body weight makes them Ideal. The best Chess gamer's have a high IQ and the best firing consultants are low on Empathy and large in assertiveness.


Would you argue that someone with a higher IQ that has never played chess in his life can defeat a lifelong chess player with a moderate IQ? The plain and simple fact is: you are good at what you spend your time doing.

Read up on your Kenyan analogy, because the facts are on my side, in that they do the right things to improve their skill (whether they know it or not) http://www.npr.org/sections/goatsan...makes-kenyas-marathon-runners-the-worlds-best


Look, we all want to believe in magic, but that idea of wish-fulfillment is equally lazy and stupid. Today, do the things that others won't so tomorrow you can do what others can't.
 
Yes there are things you can do to improve your IQ... brain training and making complex puzzles ... I don't think you can bring a 100 to a 160. (Lets cal this a talent) Can people learn to be creative? I think people that want to be creative can develop it if the have it to begin with. Not all people that have a talent will use it or have a desire to develop it. There are a lot of people that have a penis of 35cm that don"t want to become a porn star or have a good physique to become a professional dancer... I think the people that learn to be creative have the desire and potential to be creative. Me for example started at a very old age (24) in art school.

Everything you've stated here refuted your original argument. You also modify the meaning of talent a lot. Talent can apparently mean; interest in a particular topic, being slightly better at something than someone else of equal status, intelligence, and penis size

And as for porn stars, you can get a penile enlargement. BOOM! INSTANT TALENT, BABY!
 
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Once again we are off on tangents, reel this back in to to the OP's original post please.
 
35cm penis... damn that sounds like a huge number

Here I am using inches like a sucker

Once again we are off on tangents, reel this back in to to the OP's original post please.

Unfortunately the OP is a giant wall of text... I don't think many people are going to read that.
People want to read things that are formatted like a screen play
 
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