Good point Rik, I guess I'll have to share it and see

Also a good point Ernest, I've been writing creatively pretty much since I was able to write, so I'd like to think I'm not too bad at it.
Alright, I am terrible at keeping things short, so here is an incredibly long brief overview:
It starts of with Hennley and Echo (at 20) having sex while Hennley's voice over talks about pretty much just discarding your life. She lifts her face to his skin and breaths him in. The voice over says that nothing will ever smell the way he did.
Then we go the present where Hennley is 43. Hogan (44) shows up and delivers a battered envelope and the news that Echo has been dead for almost 20 years. After he leaves Hennley goes and sits on her bed.
And we're back in the past. Hennley is 16. Hennley meets Echo, who is also 16. They develop a lustful, controlling and pretty much one sided relationship. They have unprotected sex and panic, but a few weeks later Hennley gets her period. She calls Echo to tell him and after expressing his relief, he breaks up with her. She goes camping with her parents and has sex with some random guy on the beach of the lake.
A few weeks later Hennley's sister Michelle (who she lives with) watches her retching in the toilet and asks if she is pregnant. After a little sex education from Michelle and a pregnancy test, also courtesy of Michelle, Hennley discovers that yep, she is well and truly knocked up.
She tells Echo and he says that he'll support her no matter what, it's her choice, etc etc. She agonises over the decision, but she knows there's only one solution.
Hennley, Michelle, Jan (their mother) and Echo all go to a women's health clinic and Hennley gets an abortion.
After a recovery day with her best friend Hennley visits Echo on her way back to her sisters. He breaks up with her, again, this time stating that she doesn't need him any more and a bunch of other crap. Hennley says it's too late for him to decide he cares and that's that.
She moves back in with her parents, and pretty much sluts around all over the place for several years.
Eventually she runs into a boy she went to primary school with and his comments about what he's heard about her force her to actually look at herself properly.
Then she comes across a few of the old group of friends she had, including Echo's best friend, Hogan.
The next day she wakes up and realises she's slept with Hogan. A big fight ensues and he literally throws her out.
So she ends up drunk and missing a shoe in the gutter outside the shops where she first met Echo and that's when Zac pulls up and offers her a lift. He awkwardly rebuffs her advances because he feels it wouldn't be right. He gets her number instead and texts her the next day.
They go out and he tells her he's a virgin and just generally a wonderfully sweet guy.
Eventually they move in together and everything is going swell. So of course Echo calls her in the middle of the night, crying, and she agrees to meet him after she finishes work the next day.
Skip to the two of them in his bedroom. He has a little sook about the family they never got to have but she says she's with Zac now, too bad, deal with it. Then he starts actually crying, like he's really upset and he asks her to just hold him for a little while.
And here we come back to the first scene again.
In the morning he tells her he wants to be alone and she goes absolutely apeshit. After he says that he just wanted to fuck her again she points out that he said he loved her. His response is along the lines of not many girls can do what you do, I trained you after all and without hesitation she slaps him. She tells him to look into her eyes and tell her he doesn't love her. He does. She gets dressed, gets her things, goes to the door and pauses. She says that maybe one day when she's forgotten how this feels, she'll feel sorry for him.
Then she catches the train home for the last time and the voice over talks about having someone who makes you feel like scent is only one sense and yay every one's happy.
Finally we come back to the present where Zac arrives home to find Hennley still curled up on the bed. She shows him the envelope and tells him she doesn't care what it says, get rid of it, burn it, whatever.
So they go into the kitchen and he holds the envelope while she takes a stove lighter and sets it on fire. Zac drops it into the sink and they kiss. Their daughter comes in and friendly banter between her and Zac ensues so Hennley just stands and watches the ashes wash down the sink and smiles. Aw.
That took way longer than it should have. I suck at being brief, sorry every one
