story Share your story concepts.

[Semiazas]

Figured I'd make a thread where people can share their ideas for screenplays and plots and get feedback on them and maybe share them for others to use.
I figure I'll get the ball rolling.

I have an idea for a short film that is as of yet untitled and will involve a very small cast (between as little as 2 to max of possibly 5)
It explores the idea that a mirror reveals another side of someone, so when they look in mirrors, they see another part of themselves and it brings about a series of events around a group of people as one of them thinks they're going insane because of what they see on the other side of the mirror.

 

[sina12345]

Sweet. Can't wait to see it. How many pages?

The word file I have now is around 4 pages without the 3rd act, so I think with it it might be 7, but I don't want it to be that long, so I'm probably going to try and shave it down to 4-5. A lot of my script is on paper when I write it during my spare at school so I still have to transfer over some stuff.

 

[Murdock]

I'm pretty sure you're friend didn't coin it. I feel like I've seen that, either in a movie, or in a stand-up routine. It's still funny, though.

Hey, what ever happened to the Magical Balls story?

I'm pretty sure he didn't either. I have a buddy that's been saying that since the 90's. The earliest quote I can find of this exact line is from the 1989 movie Heathers. But its just a variation on a much older theme. Eg.

-Do you like apples?

-Yes

-Me too, wanna f*ck!

 

[Cracker Funk]

The word file I have now is around 4 pages without the 3rd act, so I think with it it might be 7, but I don't want it to be that long, so I'm probably going to try and shave it down to 4-5. A lot of my script is on paper when I write it during my spare at school so I still have to transfer over some stuff.

For what it's worth, based on seeing your previous work, I think a 7-pager would be a good length for you. Sometimes the way to keep it brief is in pacing and editing. Just a thought.

 

[Murdock]

I have an idea for a 30 minute shortr about a guy stranded on the toilet. Luckily he has reading material.

 

[Cracker Funk]

I have an idea for a 30 minute shortr about a guy stranded on the toilet. Luckily he has reading material.

 

[insert_cliche_here]

"Did you just fart?"
"What?"
"Because you blew me away."

I have an idea I'd sort of forgotten about that CF's idea has reminded me off. It would be kind of a comedy about the daughter of Satan returning to Hell after dumping the angel she left for in the first place. Her brother is none to impressed to see her back, since she has always been the favourite and he was in line to inherit the throne. He goes to visit the ditched angel, to try and repair their relationship and get rid of his sister, but he inadvertently kinda starts a war. Many laughs ensue.

 

[Murdock]

"Did you just fart?"
"What?"
"Because you blew me away."

I have an idea I'd sort of forgotten about that CF's idea has reminded me off. It would be kind of a comedy about the daughter of Satan returning to Hell after dumping the angel she left for in the first place. Her brother is none to impressed to see her back, since she has always been the favourite and he was in line to inherit the throne. He goes to visit the ditched angel, to try and repair their relationship and get rid of his sister, but he inadvertently kinda starts a war. Many laughs ensue.

@ the first part.

Thats not a bad idea.

 

[Buddy Greenfield]

Senior Citizen Kane

The main character has Alzheimer’s, so we are led through a random maze-like jumble of flashbacks (that might or might not have actually happened), only to discover that sadly the character can’t remember, and unfortunately no one seems to care anyways.

-Thanks-

 

[NickClapper]

Senior Citizen Kane

The main character has Alzheimer’s, so we are led through a random maze-like jumble of flashbacks (that might or might not have actually happened), only to discover that sadly the character can’t remember, and unfortunately no one seems to care anyways.

-Thanks-

If you can't find a buyer for that then there really is no hope for the rest of us...

 

[Cracker Funk]

Senior Citizen Kane

The main character has Alzheimer’s, so we are led through a random maze-like jumble of flashbacks (that might or might not have actually happened), only to discover that sadly the character can’t remember, and unfortunately no one seems to care anyways.

-Thanks-

Lol. That premise could work well for a "Memento" type of story, too.

 

[Buddy Greenfield]

I have this old near future fiction thing (that I have mention elsewhere before) laying around called “...camera , action!” that deals with the potential dramatic ramfications surrounding the film industry when a politically leveraged energy conservation experiment is put in place that limits big productions to only shooting half of it’s yearly releases using artificial light while the other half of all theatrical releases as mandated by law to be shot using natural light. (Kind of mini series or series feel)

It's kind of like if you woke up tomorrow and the law had become such that only half of the movies coming out in the next 5 years would things be made with lights, then what might happen or change or develop, from gear to unions, to script considerations to locations to budgets to candle specialists.

Very narrow appeal, but a weird idea.

-Thanks-

 

[Cracker Funk]

DSLR sales would shoot through the roof!

 

[Buddy Greenfield]

That kind of stuff is the notion of the idea, not only the potential sudden shift in things, but a look at the political and financial and backroom deals underbelly of such change.

-Thanks-

 

[Cracker Funk]

Sounds like an interesting concept, as far as exploring the ramifications. My only issue is plausibility -- why would the government make such a demand?

 

[Buddy Greenfield]

Yes, I agree it is slightly fantsical, but to me at the same time not a huge leap in comparison to some style of stories.

Why or how it could happen I don't know, maybe a green movement type thing pushed by the right amount of people? Depends who might gain by it too. ( I never really explored it beyond the surface.)

-Thanks-

 

[Cracker Funk]

Or, there's always the option of making it balls-to-the-wall fantastical, by writing a few things in that make it clear to the audience that this is a be-prepared-to-suspend-disbelief kind of thing.

 

[Buddy Greenfield]

Well yeah, it could be all kinds of ways, and one would be that kind of hyped up surreal overtly strange new world set-up, but in the end one would have to accept the fictional back drop or not, same as anything. Can I see flying cars and a world like Blade Runner in 2019? No, but the dramatic elements transposed onto that back drop are relatable, same as a lot of things. You could do something similar (yet in practical context) during the civil war, and still be within the kind of political/social/financial implications or ramifications realm of drama that I mean, and in the end be faced with the same plausibility and the suspension of disbelief issues.

-Thanks-

 

[kgasser2]

Good advice. As for my Jesus Action Hero concept, I'm not so worried about theft, cuz I just don't see any studio greenlighting it, and to make it an indie production completely misses the point.

Anyway, I've got a few ideas bouncing around my head, one of which I will definitely NOT be posting publicly. It's a bio-pic, and one that is completely different from any bio-pic that has ever been done before (it's not a musician, or an historical figure, etc.). It's a pretty huge story -- big enough that it's surprising that Hollywood hasn't made this a subject of any movie yet, so yeah, I'm keeping under wraps.

In addition to my super-secret bio-pic, I'm very likely going to end up doing a time-travel movie. "Lost in Time 3" -- Imagine a story with the folding-over-itself complexity of "Primer", starring "Harold & Kumar", with fast-paced classic Spielbergian action-adventure.

And finally, the other story I'm considering is inspired by Kurt Russel's "Soldier", but told very differently.

is it a biopic on james cameron?

 

[kgasser2]

"Did you just fart?"
"What?"
"Because you blew me away."

I have an idea I'd sort of forgotten about that CF's idea has reminded me off. It would be kind of a comedy about the daughter of Satan returning to Hell after dumping the angel she left for in the first place. Her brother is none to impressed to see her back, since she has always been the favourite and he was in line to inherit the throne. He goes to visit the ditched angel, to try and repair their relationship and get rid of his sister, but he inadvertently kinda starts a war. Many laughs ensue.

i would watch that!

 

[Cracker Funk]

is it a biopic on james cameron?

Yes, kgass, you nailed it. Must've taken you all night to think up that clever little quip.