I've been toying with an idea for my 6th feature length screenplay and I was looking to put the logline and synopsis out there for you guys to rip apart. Here goes.
The Islander: Sci-fi/mystery
A barbarian man is sent through a portal to uncover the secrets of a mysterious civilization long ago sealed off from civilized life.
The selling points of the idea come in on some of the details I've created, such as:
1. The barbarian, Maruke, wears a technologically advanced suit with powers he cannot comprehend, and automated functions that are a constant surprise/help to him when navigating this dangerous land. Think a tense chase scene leading to the edge of a chasm, where Maruke takes a leap of faith in the magic suit, and it deploys a flying device to save him.
2. His task is to set down portals for an expedition team to enter, which he successfully does mid-way through the first act. The expedition team, civilized, educated, arrive to find that the sand literally sinks from below their feet. Somehow their intelligence is destroying this place simply by being present.
3. Maruke's second task is to create a return portal back to earth (His suit leads him to the locations suitable for such portals), however, on his journey he discovers remnants of the abandoned civilization that had sealed this place away. He finds out through their history that the world will begin to dissolve at the arrival of civilization. And worse, the destruction would follow Maruke back to Earth if he opened a return portal home--or if the expedition opens a portal home.
4. So the 3rd act of the movie is Maruke chasing down the surviving members of the expedition through a dissolving landscape in an attempt to stop them (and ultimately eliminate them) from opening a portal home to Earth, meanwhile, the expedition, chock full of badly needed information and data about this new world, is trying to make it home before they are swallowed up, leaving Earth with no idea of what happened on the other side.
Naturally there's a 3 part mystery regarding the civilization and its relation to the humans on Earth, and why there's a portal linking the worlds, but I haven't fleshed all of that out yet.
I know parts of this share a resemblance to Stargate, but that doesn't really bother me.
If you've read this much, thanks. I'll happily read a screenplay of yours and give feedback if you'd like to send me a PDF. Ccolebrooked@gmail.com
Connor
The Islander: Sci-fi/mystery
A barbarian man is sent through a portal to uncover the secrets of a mysterious civilization long ago sealed off from civilized life.
The selling points of the idea come in on some of the details I've created, such as:
1. The barbarian, Maruke, wears a technologically advanced suit with powers he cannot comprehend, and automated functions that are a constant surprise/help to him when navigating this dangerous land. Think a tense chase scene leading to the edge of a chasm, where Maruke takes a leap of faith in the magic suit, and it deploys a flying device to save him.
2. His task is to set down portals for an expedition team to enter, which he successfully does mid-way through the first act. The expedition team, civilized, educated, arrive to find that the sand literally sinks from below their feet. Somehow their intelligence is destroying this place simply by being present.
3. Maruke's second task is to create a return portal back to earth (His suit leads him to the locations suitable for such portals), however, on his journey he discovers remnants of the abandoned civilization that had sealed this place away. He finds out through their history that the world will begin to dissolve at the arrival of civilization. And worse, the destruction would follow Maruke back to Earth if he opened a return portal home--or if the expedition opens a portal home.
4. So the 3rd act of the movie is Maruke chasing down the surviving members of the expedition through a dissolving landscape in an attempt to stop them (and ultimately eliminate them) from opening a portal home to Earth, meanwhile, the expedition, chock full of badly needed information and data about this new world, is trying to make it home before they are swallowed up, leaving Earth with no idea of what happened on the other side.
Naturally there's a 3 part mystery regarding the civilization and its relation to the humans on Earth, and why there's a portal linking the worlds, but I haven't fleshed all of that out yet.
I know parts of this share a resemblance to Stargate, but that doesn't really bother me.
If you've read this much, thanks. I'll happily read a screenplay of yours and give feedback if you'd like to send me a PDF. Ccolebrooked@gmail.com
Connor