archived-videos Swift - Trailer

[JakeSully]

I re-edited my entry to a 48hr film contest as a trailer. I'd like to hear what you think!

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=CrKFhVF3bt8


And here's the original.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=eL2g4xF6t5M

 

[JakeSully]

Added english subtitles.

 

[JakeSully]

Anyhow, comments would be appreciated... I hate to say this, but I'm really impatient

 

[Murdock]

It seems incomplete. But, with some faster paced cuts, I like the original better.

 

[rockerrockstar]

I agree I think the original was better paced and the music fit better. It works better as a short then a trailer so far.

 

[JakeSully]

Might have to re-edit/color correct as a short then...
Thanks!

 

[Ernest Worthing]

Missed this when you posted it. I guess the advice is too late now but i agree with the others. It seems much more interesting when presented as a story.

Anyhow, any updates on it?