The trailer is nonlinear and it's about a former child star who no one wants to take a chance on possibly except this young, up and coming talent agent.I still don't get the gist
Damn, I screwed up on that Taxi line but I used Past instead of Pass purposely. So, it was by design. Constructive criticism sounds more like nitpicking but I do it too so ehh. I can hear the dialog clearly over the phone so i can't take that critique seriously. It's finished now.Constructive crit I hope:
First mistake is Jodie Foster is in Taxi Driver, not Taxi, that's a TV show. Major flub to have in the trailer for the person supposedly an agent.
Dialog is hard to hear. She makes a few sounds I can't tell what she's saying.
Is the title supposed to suggest an hour past her "prime?" The idiom using time is not correct but not sure if that is by design.
but I used Past instead of Pass purposely. So, it was by design.
Constructive criticism sounds more like nitpicking but I do it too so ehh.
I can hear the dialog clearly over the phone so i can't take that critique seriously.
The question was about using "prime" instead of "time".
The devil is in the details.
I agree with indietalk: there's no clear grasp of the story here.
But you should. Listening over the phone is in no way a clear representation of what's going on here. Not by a long-shot. You're also deeply familiar with both the script and the recorded footage and sound, so you already know the lines.
Her dialog sounds way off-axis to me, like a camera mic (or a very poorly placed boomed mic). It makes her first two (very short) lines very hard to hear, or to discern. It took me several rewinds and replays to figure out that her first line is "nice office". Still not sure what she says on the second. "Madame"?
Unless you expect "over the phone" to be the only way people experience this short film, the sound needs attention.
You don't want to know what any of us think. Why do you even ask?Okay. Pros. All I ask if someone post their trailer so i can gauge it against mines and she the shortcomings. Nope! Just a circle jerk.
Wow, that's some good photography there, and well put together trailer. Very Hollywood-esqe.
Thanks! Something useful and insightful and simply nitpicking.What has been said above holds validity. It is difficult to hear what is being said. I was able to make out what was being said, I just had to strain a bit to hear it. You'll find the suggestion of raising the volume a worthy note. It is tough to tell what the story is about exactly, although the title cards do help. Often I'll go back and try to get to the bare bones of the story and find the simplest way of conveying that message. Even having character flat out saying their motivation at times. Trailers sell your film, therefore withholding too much information from those you are selling to can harm you.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1PPSrXIz2I0