Fantastic! I will give comments on what I thought could be better, but in all it doesn't matter because this one worked. I must ask, what was the budget because this wasn't small potatoes?
First, I can't believe how small the screen was on your website. If this is suppose to show off your film (which is the highlight) then show the damn thing off. It looks like to me you don't need to hide anything because the film looks professional and well done. So I would go back to your web designer and demand they fix this issue because it's just way to small compared to the rest of the page.
Titles looked good.
Up to 2:55 you have the actors so centered in the frame. You have this incredible set and this unique chair which could have been used as depth of field for a short while but she stands right in front of it. It's an important prop and she blocks it? Something that important should have more focus then you gave it in the beginning, foreshadow it (but be careful not to hit your audience over the head with it). That is why I suggested using it as depth for a
short while. She seemed nervous/timid when she came in, she glanced at it and then steps in front of it. I would have made her a little nervous about it, even hide behind it because then it would show its power (and it is powerful). Also, Mr. Bojagi had a desk in front of him and you never used it for depth in the frame during this time. Instead he had a flat background with the top of a chair which blended in the back ground beside him. In fact, once this scene was over I forgotten he had a desk and they used it later as a prop. All I'm saying is you had items for depth up to 2:55 and ended up with a flat image. You don't need the depth the whole time during this time frame but present it first and then move the camera forward to a flatter shot.
I really like the shots, edits, sound and reactions of characters as he slid down the ladder.
Now, at 3:02, great depth of field and rack focus.
Excellent effects @ 4:00
When questioning "Granddaughter is involved with anyone?" she says no, but the graphic shows two girls only walking and talking. Now you don't need to show them kissing but I think a gentle rub of the shoulder would have been a bit more informative/intimate. Yes, yes, I got what you are saying but truly two ladies talking doesn't mean gay. Don't be afraid to show some kind of intimate relation. But again, I guess you did get the point across with dialogue but a small, little bit of action would have stamped it (IMO) and you didn't have to be so graphic.
I liked it when he pulled the lever and stood in front of the chair where she sat. The graphic which highlighted the back of his head was just great, almost angelic.
Also, I didn't mind the center framing of the characters when he was lecturing her @ 7:00 (ish). A. we have been in the space long enough at this moment and B. the lecture allowed it because it was like teacher talking to student/Boss speaking to employee, etc.. Also, perfect music as he was lecturing her.
Sound was great all around and music was great.
Lighting great.
Editing and effects great.
Acting fantastic.
Great continuity.
So all around, a great, professional looking film.
As for story, the beginning with the mystery of the location, Mr. Bojagi (behavior), and props did hook me. Not really the story/action at that time but everything else did. The story worked for me but the MTV generation kids unfortunately might get bored quickly which is a shame because the story does open like a rose. It's rare to get stories like this and hopefully in the future Hollywood will come back to them. I like the message/theme you had and your main character learned a lesson.
A great gem on this board and something everyone should strive for. Let me guess……..48 hour film festival? (Just kidding, jokin' with other posts I had.)
