Okay, so I've got a character who took a bullet to the chest and, subsequently, is having a little trouble breathing.
Does anybody have any suggestions on how to make it clear that he's gasping for breath during his dialogue? I don't want to put "(gasping for breath)" in front of every line over 20 or 30 scenes. I used ellipses throughout to show pauses, but my readers last night didn't quite get it until I explained it to them.
Thanks!
Does anybody have any suggestions on how to make it clear that he's gasping for breath during his dialogue? I don't want to put "(gasping for breath)" in front of every line over 20 or 30 scenes. I used ellipses throughout to show pauses, but my readers last night didn't quite get it until I explained it to them.
Thanks!