Well, I watched the short over, and the only thing I saw that might have been good was some focus trick sych as when the girl smiles, get the pic focused on and switcch to her when she looks up to smile. One other thing was that I saw that a lot of the same shots were being used. This wasn't bad, but since you supposedly was in charge, you had the creative license to change up the frame a little.
Coming to think of it, It's a great film and my ideas are just personal preference so if they aren't YOU then don't change yourself just because a 13 year old is trying to look cool on a forum commenting on a grown mans vid.
Thanks, DigiRoots