Hey guys!
I'd like some feed back on my new script. I'm not worried about the format of it but
there are some obvious weak points that I'd like some help with. So thank you for
taking the time to read it!
The link should be fixed. Sorry about that.
Screen Play Link:
REMOVED LINK DUE TO NO RESPONSES.
Hi Zaco. Welcome! Using proper screenwriting format is really an important part of the discipline. I know many starting writers want feedback on their stories but that's only one third of the elements that make up the script (format, structure and story). It's good to learn and use it out of the gate. That helps experienced writers give you better advice. A good story does not make a good script though a good script has a good story. A good script also has good structure/pacing and is well formatted.
Hey, thank you for taking the time to read it. I'm actually gonna have this thread removed due to the 80+ views and no responses. I do not want to leave my work out there and have it be taken. But thank you for reading it and your feedback. I will be rewriting it for the third time in hoping to fix some of these plot holes.
There are many reasons for multiple views and no comments. Often members and guests look to see who has posted, what the discussion is, etc. without ever visiting the link. To get a better idea, I'd look to see how many times the google link was visited. I doubt that it was 80+ times. Often before I comment on a script, I'll see the comments of others. There are several knowledgeable people here, so you don't have to hear the same feedback multiple times. And to be blunt, having read hundreds of scripts, there just aren't many 'new' and 'unique' ideas from writers. Most have different characters, locations, and a few slight variations, but the same mystery lies underneath. There is never a guarantee obviously, but more guests here are curious how to write and want to see your style than steal your idea. It takes a lot of work to make a movie. Taking a raw story to make it a real script takes work. Selling a script is even more difficult if you're not making it yourself. That sad fact is that some really good, clever scripts go unmade. Shorts don't make money, so why worry about it? Someone pays to make it into a movie, pays to put it in a festival and that's the end of it. I'm the first to encourage writers to document and register scripts before submitting/posting them. (On the bright side, someone who wants to steal your script would want it properly formatted. Thieves tend to be lazy bastards.

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While I appreciate your concerns, my advice is that you only share the first ten pages of your script if you're concerned. The first ten pages are sufficient for a reader to determine the quality of your writing, problems of formatting, issues of structure and pacing, character development and dialogue issues. For many readers the first five pages are the make-or-break stage. If it fails to capture a professional readers interest by the first five pages, it's passed on (rejected).
I don't mean to make light of your legitimate concern. However, you must find balance. If you are asking advice, you need to expect that many will read without comment, some will read just to see the comments, some will read just to learn how to write, and others click on the wrong thread. A few will be looking for ideas. Unfortunately, you can't copyright or protect ideas. Copyright protects the finished piece and extend some protections as to adaptation. It doesn't protect the story idea itself. If you want feedback on your script, you only need the first ten pages. If you want feedback on your story idea, well, then you need to put yourself out there. You have to ask yourself, since you've been on this forum, how many times have you viewed a thread without commenting? Why? Have you only checked it out 25 or so times? Do you always log in to check, or do you sometimes just go in as a guest to do a quick peek? Even reading your own thread can add to the read count. Don't panic. There are people who can't give their screenplays away, and who would love for someone to steal them and make them into a movie. Good luck with your future screenwriting endeavors.