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Nothing about this is proper format. Because of that it makes it impossible forIt's a comedy, drama, coming of age tale about a teenager navigating through life. I would love to hear critiques about format, story, dialogue, and I guess everything else that goes into a good script.
Thank you for the advice I changed the format and website, so now it's good to read and be reviewed.Nothing about this is proper format. Because of that it makes it impossible for
someone like me to even get started on story and dialogue.
That's pretty blunt and harsh. But the very first thing a screenwriter needs to
do is look at and master the format. It may be a terrific story but as you post it
it is not a screenplay. Is it because Google docs screwed up you format?
Another thing that is harsh to hear is about spelling, grammar and typos. It's
best to not present your work to strangers without checking all these things.
Not so important on messageboards or texts or email between friends, but
if you want someone to take their time to read and critique it's essential.
Fix all that and I'll give it another look. You clearly put a lot of work into this.
PDF please.I changed the formatting again now it is readable and has a better format.
So it wasn't a Google Docs issue.Thank you for the advice I changed the format and website, so now it's good to read and be reviewed.
Yes - great suggestion.Post a synopsis or treatment and we can critique your story while you study up on format.
Thanks for the critiques!!!So it wasn't a Google Docs issue.
Format is essential. There are variations that writers can argue about, but
the general format is written in stone. You need to look up screenplay
format and copy it.
What scripts have you read?
Write only what is seen on screen: "Mary is Paul's Mom, and John's stepmom."
cannot be shown.
You need to correct things like "As John proceeds to walks he talks to himself in his head."
Write in present time - John walks. He does not proceed to walks. He walks.
Something you might want to try is not using camera directions. You are telling a story
not directing on paper. Give it a try. Can you show what's happening on screen without
writing what the camera is doing?
Your character John says, "My writing can't be condensed". But you need to condense
your writing. You over-write. It's a good character trait. It's bad for screenwriting.
Read five scripts. Read a few websites that explain proper format. Do a full re-write.