Considering that the *jib* shot follows a title text (graffiti?) on a wall as alluded to by OP, I think it will work pretty nicely. At least one shot was out of focus, and I don't think it was deliberate...or, at least it didn't serve your *story* or prove to be a stylistic choice. The stunts were well done. Some of the interior shots were too green (flourescents) for my taste. (how about a lights out interior with ops and flashlights zipping across the zombie (s)?...then some of those blackout transitions would flow a little more nicely. Just a thought) I'm not a big fan of (so many) blackout transitions, it makes me think the editor doesn't know how to cut dynamically, or the director didn't film enough coverage to allow for options when cutting. All in all, a pretty decent start. You guys said you are 15. I was a couple years older when I started art school, you have to learn to accept a critique....people are only trying to help you improve and really do want to see you succeed.
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