Im new to screenwriting but i have started this little piece here
http://www.scribd.com/doc/19477198/Red-Draft-1
any advice welcome.
http://www.scribd.com/doc/19477198/Red-Draft-1
any advice welcome.
From the very first page this is a perfect example of "talking the plot". Dialogue is too on the nose. And they all sound alike. Character is revealed more by what they do (action) and by what they don't say (subtext).
These are characters from a previous, existing film?
Not a copy of the character from another film but the basis of which I could visualise what kind of person I was thinking of. There are a few elements from this Japaneese animation that are quite the same.
Never would of got that zensteve
To master the art, learn from the masters. Read a lot of screenplays. Sometimes they can even remind you that that everyone has challenges. For instance, I got a hold of the original first draft screenplay for Jurassic Park. Michael wrote this draft. I was shocked at how bad it was comparatively speaking.
Collect and read scripts. It will help your writing tremendously.
I have been browsing a little on this site http://www.simplyscripts.com/ I think the scripts there are hosted on other sites. Im not sure which versions they are.
How do I know.