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screenplay How to - Montages with different setups/view points

I'm trying to add montage shots from two perspectives. Is this a right way of doing so?

Rajesh hangs up the phone and slides it back into his pocket. He rushes back to the bike and picks up the helmet, laying on the bike’s mirror.
BEGIN MONTAGE:
QUICK CUTS:
IN THE MIRROR OF RAJESH’S BIKE:
-- Fastens the helmet.
-- Slips on the driving glasses.
ON THE MAIN FRAME:
-- Turns ON the bike key and the lights on the digital meters glow.
-- Pulls the clutch
-- Shifts the gear.
-- Raises the accelerator.
-- Looks sideways.
END MONTAGE
VROOM! VROOM! VROOM! The bike jump starts with a thick cloud of smoke.

In other place I have this. At a traffic signal Rajesh was waiting for signal. Meanwhile, some past events flash in his memory.
QUICK FLASHES:
-- Rajesh's father struggle to breath on the bed.
-- A doctor checks the father and throw a peril looks at Rajesh.
BACK TO SCENE
Honks of vehicles pull back Rajesh. He accelerates the bike.
The screen should return to the original scene after hearing the honks. How to write it in correct way?
 
I know this isn't answering your question, but two thoughts:

1. I have a personal rule that there should never be more than one montage in a movie - and I mentally mark down any movie that I watch that has more than one. I'd rather see scenes developed.

2. I see the reason why you'd have a montage for the second one, but why the first? That seems like it's just a scene that may incorporate some quick cuts.

Obviously this is just personal opinion :)
 
I know this isn't answering your question, but two thoughts:

1. I have a personal rule that there should never be more than one montage in a movie - and I mentally mark down any movie that I watch that has more than one. I'd rather see scenes developed.

2. I see the reason why you'd have a montage for the second one, but why the first? That seems like it's just a scene that may incorporate some quick cuts.

Obviously this is just personal opinion :)
RE: Two montages... What @mlesemann said... Especially in a short.
 
When I think of a montage, I think of the passage of time. In the movie Rocky there is a montage that shows Rocky getting in shape for the big fight. The montage shows shots of him training over the course of weeks. .. In Foot Loose there is a montage that shows Christopher Penn learning to dance. At first, he can't dance at all, but after watching him practice and learn for a week or so, we see that he finally learned how to dance.


I think the sequences you're describing are just fast cuts that need to be put together by a skilled editor.
 
If you are looking for example montages to study, you can watch "The Umbrella Academy". It has a 2 minute montage every 4 minutes.

A technique worth mentioning is coupling narration with montages, which has been used to good effect in a number of cases. Scorsese in particular has mastered this technique.
 
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