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We had a discussion about how I was going to do the lighting in this thread on indietalk
Looks good, but....you crossed the stage line. Both characters are looking the same direction. oops
I like the impact of #1. It could be a tadddddd tighter, like buying the gun, maybe some jump cuts, when the guy opens the gun box you actually here a "tap tap"on the table, and then again. It would be nice to score the trailer, music really ties it all together.
#2 is okay. Needs music. VERY dry when the old man speaks and the bird noise in the beginning is way too high. And it's "SAFE" deposit box not safety. So that one irks me.
I really like #1. A hair tighter, music, boom! Cool!
#2 VERY dry when the old man speaks