OK, Im in last rewrite of my last little girl script (short, 20, 30 pages), and being the fool I am, I'm starting over.. not throwing anything out, just steeping back….
Help me tighten up the log line and synopsis..
So, starting with a logline..
A little girl and her father battle an alien menace for the soul of planet earth.
Synopsis:
For several years, the enormous golden star ship has floated in the sky over rural country side, silent and impassive, ignoring humanity. As the world slowly rebuilds from upheaval caused by the arrival, something has changed! Birth rates are steadily declining, sick and injured people and animals are consumed in cold golden flames just before death; it is slow burn to the end of the human race and humanity is just too tired to care. In this strange new world Lyn, who may be the last little girl on earth, helps her father James prepare to rescue her mother and siblings from the golden ship.
It is during one such rescue attempt that James is mortally wounded and is consumed in golden flames. Lyn strikes out on her own to rescue her family. Lost, hurt an alone, she is helped by her father, who is now aboard the star-ship, and together they discover the true purpose of the alien ship and battle to defeat the menace in time to rekindle the fading spark of humanity.
Help me tighten up the log line and synopsis..
So, starting with a logline..
A little girl and her father battle an alien menace for the soul of planet earth.
Synopsis:
For several years, the enormous golden star ship has floated in the sky over rural country side, silent and impassive, ignoring humanity. As the world slowly rebuilds from upheaval caused by the arrival, something has changed! Birth rates are steadily declining, sick and injured people and animals are consumed in cold golden flames just before death; it is slow burn to the end of the human race and humanity is just too tired to care. In this strange new world Lyn, who may be the last little girl on earth, helps her father James prepare to rescue her mother and siblings from the golden ship.
It is during one such rescue attempt that James is mortally wounded and is consumed in golden flames. Lyn strikes out on her own to rescue her family. Lost, hurt an alone, she is helped by her father, who is now aboard the star-ship, and together they discover the true purpose of the alien ship and battle to defeat the menace in time to rekindle the fading spark of humanity.