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PTP...

Can you break your script up into two? I imagine the Common character script is really the EDITORS story if you will and should be treated separately from the remote unit story of your group of characters. We have not closed on the common character setup and over story, so I'd suggest you be very STRICT on that aspect and not let the stories mix, or rather that we should CLOSE on the details of the over arching story AND the connecting character story first.

Right now there is plenty of detail to go forward with a remote unit story, so long as it doesn't make a lot of assumptions about what the connecting story is doing. Deciding who your characters, what the setting is, and there interactions is fine, but your not able to depend on your characters RESPONDING to the TV shows or radio broadcast in any specific way until those have at least been defined loosely. ,Make sense?
 
OK momentum is a big force, don't get in its way..

PTP, your far ahead.. can you tell US...

What is the story duration? (does the story take place over a month? A week? A day?)

When is the story set (presumed today, but a slight bit in the future might work better to explain the "facts")

Who is the main connecting character?
 
The connecting factor that will tie in all of our material, and make the transition from one side of the globe to the other, from character to character- or atleast what i propose- is the broadcast.

The television broadcast of the results, of the build up...

Now, i haven't attempted this. This, i believe, would be a seperate piece all together.

However, i've proceeded as the local radio-station chimes, and rings croakily throughout, fading into the the background at times, yet keeping us informed, and anchoring such a cruel event with putrid anticipation.

My story follows a family of three, in a small rural village, on the day of the broadcast. Their daughter, never-named, remains silent throughout, carrying herself with an adolescent naivety to the could-be horrors that loom. We glide between the unspoken what-ifs of her parents, living in the suspense, and tension of the wait.

I've focused, although subtly, on numbers. Focusing in the mindset of how it would be broadcast, the number is drawn before the name, and there lies its importance.

We'll see, i guess. Fingers crossed.
 
Well, it'd be nice to do something in spanish, and yes, it would add that certain..."it's everywhere" feeling to the project. Maybe someone could go with french, italian, portuguese...Also, my spanish is not neutral, think argentinian.

No porblem with adding subtitles.
 
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Papertwinproductions said:
The connecting factor that will tie in all of our material, and make the transition from one side of the globe to the other, from character to character- or atleast what i propose- is the broadcast.

The television broadcast of the results, of the build up...

Now, i haven't attempted this. This, i believe, would be a seperate piece all together.

However, i've proceeded as the local radio-station chimes, and rings croakily throughout, fading into the the background at times, yet keeping us informed, and anchoring such a cruel event with putrid anticipation.

My story follows a family of three, in a small rural village, on the day of the broadcast. Their daughter, never-named, remains silent throughout, carrying herself with an adolescent naivety to the could-be horrors that loom. We glide between the unspoken what-ifs of her parents, living in the suspense, and tension of the wait.

I've focused, although subtly, on numbers. Focusing in the mindset of how it would be broadcast, the number is drawn before the name, and there lies its importance.

We'll see, i guess. Fingers crossed.
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Can you tell us what facts/figures you've used (how many organs are being donated? Who decides?)? It would be good to see which way you're going on that so that we can look to roughly emulate?

Also I think we need to decide on our 'Universal Certainties' i.e. the facts that can be referenced in each thread in order to show that all these short stories are existing in the same reality.

The Name of the President of the US:
The Name of the Pharmaceutical Company running the lottery:
The Country where the lottery first started:
The Prime Minister of GB:
A Famous Organ Pioneer:

Just bits and bobs like that. Anyone can contribute recommendations.

I think it's important that we do a good job with the TV broadcast footage. I don't know if anyone's seen FC Rabbath's Disconnected but he has some scenes that are broadcast out of a TV station and I think that's the sort of quality we should be looking for. It would be a shame if we had a deeply affecting human drama that was being 'held together' by very low production values on the TV. I recognise that it's difficult to do, which is why I draw attention to it early on.

So if anyone has experience with that it would be good to get one person working on that...perhaps...
 
NickClapper said:
Can you tell us what facts/figures you've used (how many organs are being donated? Who decides?)? It would be good to see which way you're going on that so that we can look to roughly emulate?

Also I think we need to decide on our 'Universal Certainties' i.e. the facts that can be referenced in each thread in order to show that all these short stories are existing in the same reality.

The Name of the President of the US:
The Name of the Pharmaceutical Company running the lottery:
The Country where the lottery first started:
The Prime Minister of GB:
A Famous Organ Pioneer:

Just bits and bobs like that. Anyone can contribute recommendations.
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I haven't as of yet found the need for any of the relative details above. Where we are in the material, this has been occurring for some time. So i didn't feel as though any long-haul discussions, theories, or even mentioning of the powers-that-be, would be spoken of in the ambience i'm hoping to create, it doesn't feel natural.

How, why, or where it started is something i wouldn't dare to discuss on the final-day. I can't even imagine how corse the silence would be, or whether or not I'd be able to fumble out words of any type of meaning. I'm hoping this will convey an authenticity in something so unimaginable.

Unconventional, maybe.

I'm not saying there shouldn't be intertwining-factors, but putting myself in the story, i don't believe many would be spoken of. If we where to do so, i'd stress that they're managed, and not placed and referenced within every piece. But i guess that is what we're doing right now. :P

I've went with ten organs beings drawn from the lottery, but this is completely up for debate.
 
knightly said:
Writing requires time to complete and the drive to complete - both of which I lack due to concentrations on other things. Which project do you have of mine? and what technical aspects?

I'm totally down for a collaboration!
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Risposte. Ring any bells? It was awhile ago. :)

Okay, settled. I'll write it, you shoot it. :D Just send me a list of your assets (actors, props, etc.) and available locations. If you already have an idea of what you want to do, shoot me a PM with details.
 
I absolutely agree that the last thing we want is people to be shoehorning these references into the scripts. But these common certainties will help establish that all the shorts are part of one bigger picture...

Ten sound quite few to me... I thought we were talking more like 1000... but that's up for debate :D How do other people feel on that?

I think I'll start drafting out a script at the weekend. My current idea is going to go with a fairly well known fairly old academic who, despite having plenty of people in his life, is desperately lonely and therefore conflicted as to whether he really wants the organ or not. I might try and play with his guilt over the issue... we'll see.

Out of interest, how long is your first draft shaping up at?
 
NickClapper said:
I absolutely agree that the last thing we want is people to be shoehorning these references into the scripts. But these common certainties will help establish that all the shorts are part of one bigger picture...

Ten sound quite few to me... I thought we were talking more like 1000... but that's up for debate :D How do other people feel on that?

I think I'll start drafting out a script at the weekend. My current idea is going to go with a fairly well known fairly old academic who, despite having plenty of people in his life, is desperately lonely and therefore conflicted as to whether he really wants the organ or not. I might try and play with his guilt over the issue... we'll see.

Out of interest, how long is your first draft shaping up at?
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Sounds great.

2-3 Pages. After trimmings i can get two. Although we shoot long, especially narrative.
 
The FINAL CUT.

So Im thinking that each remote unit should work to have a complete "film" which can stand on its own if so desired, however, you have to let go at some point and submit your "film" to the final editor, not raw footage, your finished work as delivered. To build a good narrative, the finished films will likely be inter cut with each other so keep that in mind when writing.. think like your writing for a prime time NETWORK TV show, create good pauses that lend themselves to "commercial breaks"
 
Chronologically speaking they're all going to have been in roughly the same time frame so that when it's edited into the full film it's not flicking back and forth between a couple of weeks before the lottery, then a day before, then a day after, then a year after...etc.

I think we should perhaps say that all the films must take place within these three days: the day before the lottery, the day of the lottery and the day after the lottery.

How does that sound?
 
OK. tech detail.

What time of day is the final broadcast? GMT?

I think this will be cool.. by necessity it will be different for many of the remote unit scripts..
 
I think 24 hours is a good duration. If you want to have most your action in night, then you pick your setting appropriately based on the REAL time of the drawing. As I believe that is the END correct?
 
In terms of the imagery I'm inclined towards twilight... 7:00 pm?

(But then that's just twilight for us (by us I mean me) greedy Brits and for you Americanos it's the middle of the day :D )
 
Sounds swell. I'm happy with that, it remaining within 24 hours. I think we'd be losing out on alot of tension, and a potentially grand climax in the results of the broadcast, to our work.
 
So do we want each film to end with the broadcast? Or are we going to show something of the aftermath of the results being announced?

EDIT: Perhaps we should arrange a Skype conference call some time to iron out these little details, then we could provide a definitive list of requirements for all writers...
 
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