how do you go about that?
V.O for the diary
V.O for the diary
In most cases a diary is about the persons feelings - and nothow do you go about that?
V.O for the diary
But to include voiceover in a script long before you begin to shoot is a sign of a lazy writer.
Why, even after several people have offered their time
and experience do you still use "ing"? I understand that
the spacing will not translate to the forum - I do not
understand why you will not take just a few moments of
your valuable time and attempt to get close to the proper
format.
what do you mean by "ing"
Thank youIt's a screenwriting format rule- passive vs active verbs.
http://www.englishpage.com/verbpage/activepassive.html
what do you mean by "ing"
int.house. day
We see Evan running up the stairs in a state of panic. he is wearing a suit and has a suit jacket is thrown over his shoulder. He runs into one of the bedrooms and begins searching for something. While looking through some items. he bumps into a pile of books and one book falls down.
EVAN
"shoot"
He picks up the book and it reads "diary". He pauses then opens the diary and begins to read one of the entries.
INT. BEDROOM. DAY. A FEW MONTHS EARLIER.
Hannah is on her bed, writing in her journal.
HANNAH V.O
"September 2, 2010, dear diary, Its my first day of high school today!"
Hannah is packing books into a back pack.then goes and brushes her hair in front of a mirror. She is constantly pacing back and forth from the mirror to the clock, checking the time.
HANNAH V.O
" It's unbelievable...and i feel so old. how am i in high school already!"
As Hanna walks to her window and opens the curtain. After the window is fully exposed she glances at the house across the street. Her neighbor Evan,a sophomore in high school, is outside getting the mail.
HANNAH V.O
"Hopefully Evan is in some of my Classes this year..When we were younger, we were like best friends"
Ext.BACK YARD. day. 7 years earlier
Evan and Hannah at age 8 are chasing each other around a playset. They are both laughing.
HANNAH V.O
" I was always at his house, or he was at mine. we were inseparable. but we've really grown apart these past few years,
the shot of the two playing fades to an empty play set."
INT. BEDROOM. DAY. A FEW MONTHS EARLIER.
Hannah is still looking out the window. Evan grabs the mail then starts walking back towards his house.
HANNAH V.O
" Especially after his mom died a few years ago. I havent seen him in forever. Hopefully we can reconnect these next four years. Well i have to go catch a bus. Bye!"
Hannah puts down the diary on her bed , grabs her pack pack, then runs out the door.
Thank you
please don't get super, defensive, annoyed, angry, disturbed or whatever when i ask this but why does everyone freak out if the format is not correct? isn't the story more important than the format of the script? Shouldn't the format be the least of my worries until i am satisfied with the story? I was writing a script earlier today and i was getting no where with my story because i was freaking out about the format. i felt like it was slowing my creativity.
this is an honest question. please do not criticize me for it.
Thank you
please don't get super, defensive, annoyed, angry, disturbed or whatever when i ask this but why does everyone freak out if the format is not correct? isn't the story more important than the format of the script? Shouldn't the format be the least of my worries until i am satisfied with the story? I was writing a script earlier today and i was getting no where with my story because i was freaking out about the format. i felt like it was slowing my creativity.
this is an honest question. please do not criticize me for it.
This is absolutely true and I 100% agree.
The trouble is is that people who know about films will not read your screenplay if it's not formatted correctly. The story may be great but the industry has laid down a standard that everyone conforms to. There are so many writers at work with good stories that it's important that you write it in the correct format, especially if you want people to actually read it and take it seriously.
It's all about communicating your idea best. Formatting properly is a small sacrifice if it gets eyes on your script.
I said exactly the same thing as Nick two days ago and youok! that makes sense! i guess it should be formatted correctly if i am presenting it to someone. Gotchya! thanks!
Thank you
please don't get super, defensive, annoyed, angry, disturbed or whatever when i ask this but why does everyone freak out if the format is not correct? isn't the story more important than the format of the script? Shouldn't the format be the least of my worries until i am satisfied with the story? I was writing a script earlier today and i was getting no where with my story because i was freaking out about the format. i felt like it was slowing my creativity.
this is an honest question. please do not criticize me for it.
No it isn't. Not when you are showing a script. Screenplayisn't the story more important than the format of the script?
Haiku is poem of seventeen syllables, in three lines of five, seven,
and five which doesn’t rhyme. If it doesn’t follow these rules it may
be a great poem, but it isn’t haiku.
Thank you
please don't get super, defensive, annoyed, angry, disturbed or whatever when i ask this but why does everyone freak out if the format is not correct? isn't the story more important than the format of the script? Shouldn't the format be the least of my worries until i am satisfied with the story? I was writing a script earlier today and i was getting no where with my story because i was freaking out about the format. i felt like it was slowing my creativity.
this is an honest question. please do not criticize me for it.
I said exactly the same thing as Nick two days ago and you
said you understood then. What happened?
Take another look at the responses in this thread. Look
at post #4 again. And then look at post #6 where I
talk about a better way to present your work.
If format freaks you out then you do not need to write
in the proper format. But when you post a script or a
scene in the incorrect format that's all people will see.
It's like taking a picture and asking people to look at the
intent of the picture and ignore that it is not in focus.
No it isn't. Not when you are showing a script. Screenplay
format isn't at all important if you are showing people your
novel.
If you cannot take the time to present your screenplay
in the screenplay format, people will not be able to comment
on anything but the improper format. If you believe that
is not fair, I kind of agree with you. But a screenplay is a very
specific style of writing.
Take all the time you need to write your story. Do not even
think about format. But before you show it to fellow screenwriters
show the deserved respect and rewrite it into the proper format.
I know you weren't trying to be disrespectful when you show asorry dude, i guess i didnt see when you wrote the same thing as nick. And what do you mean "show the deserved respect" i'm not trying to be disrespectful, i've never posted or shown anyone a script before in my life. I dont know the "proper etiquette". I'm sorry if you felt that way.
i really appreciate all the advice.
i never thought about that. thanks for the advise!