Old trailer I Did

[jenson]

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=G8Gw2JLc03g

 

[insert_cliche_here]

*they're

 

[jenson]

*they're

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[Dreadylocks]

Are you looking for feedback on this? How long ago did you make this and what was it for?

 

[Cracker Funk]

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She was simply correcting your English. It's nit-picky, but I think proper grammar is pretty important in a trailer. Your audience will be distracted when it realizes you don't know the difference between "they're", "there", and "their".

 

[jenson]

Are you looking for feedback on this? How long ago did you make this and what was it for?

This is something I did a looooooooooong time ago and I just kinda posted it up to see if anyone would give any comments

 

[jenson]

She was simply correcting your English. It's nit-picky, but I think proper grammar is pretty important in a trailer. Your audience will be distracted when it realizes you don't know the difference between "they're", "there", and "their".

I didn't realize until after I posted it. Alot of people were saying how I shouldn't have used as many words but I didn't have the option of recording a narrator for the trailer at the time.

 

[rogypro]

well you want comments... i'll give you mine...
its a trailer that takes you absolutely nowhere.
its too long, and ultimately really amateur.
its like a rocky/some killer movie i probably haven't seen.
over all, we all start somewhere, so props for the courage to make it.

 

[wheatgrinder]

One of the best VH songs ever! Whats not to like?

What kinda of rated x movie are you going to make with two dudes! lol.

 

[jenson]

One of the best VH songs ever! Whats not to like?

What kinda of rated x movie are you going to make with two dudes! lol.

 

[mahdy]

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=G8Gw2JLc03g

since u did it a long time ago, lemme ask you what you think of it??

 

[jenson]

since u did it a long time ago, lemme ask you what you think of it??

I think that if I did it again there would be narration for the trailer, No VH songs blaring over the trailer, and a bit more structure as far as the story of the trailer. I think its mediocre, but for how old I was at the time I made it, I'm proud.

 

[NickClapper]

*they're

I would actually say that you shouldn't use contractions in supertitles.

As for the trailer, I've seen a lot worse, if that's any consolation It's a little overlong and needs a bit more of a thrust to it, but I actually think it's a pretty decent attempt at a Grindhouse trailer...