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Of NoBility - a Monty Python Inspired Short

Wanted to make something good, but in a very short time frame. Just an excuse to get out and start filming with no excuses or restrictions for us. Hope you enjoy our very tiny film.
 
I see a punchline here but I think you'd really benefit from more of a setup before the punchline.
Some voice over in the beginning of the film like

I fight for honor and my king - It may be that I march to my death, but it shall be remembered that I fought bravely and died in battle
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So we know what he's writing, where is walking and why
 
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sfoster said:
I see a punchline here but I think you'd really benefit from more of a setup before the punchline.
Some voice over in the beginning of the film like



So we know what he's writing, where is walking and why
Click to expand...
Originally I was going to add in voice over, but felt it might take away rather than immerse people into it. Regardless the runtime is so short, there really isn't a need to explain much of what is going on IMO.
 
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