archived-videos My new comedy short- Salty Gulp- feedback greatly appreciated

Pretty interesting!

I was wondering where the story was going to go when I saw his toe popping out.

What would've been really cool is if the pirate popped out of the can.

You could even make this into a mini series where they go off and go on adventures together.
 
In my opinion, the video was pretty well made. The pacing could use some work, but that just takes practice. However, the story and dialogue were a bit stale and drawn out. I say next time, cut out all that unnecessary dialogue and fill the rest of the time with action that keeps the viewer watching. You can still have a lot of talking, you just have to divide it up so people don't get bored and exit the video halfway through.

Overall though I liked it. Cleanly shot and put together.
 
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