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I shot this a few months ago entirely on my cell phone.
It's not white balanced and there was no stabilization :no:

It was unscripted and I was burning with a desire to film something, anything.. so this is what I ended up with.

Watch at your own peril :weird:
(Edit: to be clear this was more an exercise in editing, and not an attempt at storytelling)
Vladimir Does Towson

For a while I didn't consider it an actual short film, but now after making a "real" one and seeing so many of the same lessons, I've decided Vladimir Does Towson is the real deal. But it wasn't meant to be entertaining.. lol
 
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Nice work! I understand you shot this awhile ago with less experience, but I'm going to critique it anyway :D

A tripod would really, really make the film more watchable.
White balance and/or color correct. It's too blue.
Cut in down. It drags. Keep our attention.
Invest in a mic.
No real story. Maybe it would be more interesting if the dog had a voiceover or there was some type of plot?

Anyway, I hope to see your new short film at some point.

Good luck! :cool:
 
Yeah, kinda lacking in that whole narrative department. Heh. :bag:

Improv is a lot harder than most people expect. Good story-telling just doesn't magically and spontaneously happen, and improv is a learned skill that really has to be honed.

At any rate, at least you're gettin' out & doin' something. Something done; something learned. Even the modest project ideas can be an educational experience.

What did you do after this, btw? I prolly saw it if it was here on the forums, but I'll check it out if I missed it.

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ChimpPhobiaFilms said:
Nice work! I understand you shot this awhile ago with less experience, but I'm going to critique it anyway :D

1 A tripod would really, really make the film more watchable.
2 White balance and/or color correct. It's too blue.
3 Cut in down. It drags. Keep our attention.
4 Invest in a mic.
5 No real story. Maybe it would be more interesting if the dog had a voiceover or there was some type of plot?

Anyway, I hope to see your new short film at some point.

Good luck! :cool:
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1 Agreed
2 Agreed
3 IDK how to cut it down, they're walking around the block. Walk half a block? Anyway you get to see my little block of towson I've lived on and all the different stores :D
4 This was filmed on a cell phone, including all the audio :D
5 Not much of a story, just a neighbor taking my dog for a walk around the block. And my dog eating something he shouldn't have in front of burger brothers

Zensteve said:
Yeah, kinda lacking in that whole narrative department. Heh.

At any rate, at least you're gettin' out & doin' something. Something done; something learned. Even the modest project ideas can be an educational experience.

What did you do after this, btw? I prolly saw it if it was here on the forums, but I'll check it out if I missed it.

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This was more an exercise in editing than anything else. I had never done any sort of editing before and I wanted some practice. As I said for a long time I didn't even consider it a short film. but I think it is.. just a boring one that wasn't meant to entertain. perhaps you could consider this a documentary

Anyway my favorite part between 5:00 and 5:10

I did vladimir does towson about 4 months before i ever joined the indietalk forum
Currently I am working on a short called Friend Zoned with actual plot, story, dialogue and a script i wrote
 
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very shackey... too much of blue... and the audio is bad... but for first short it's still ok :) the more you do the better you get ;)
 
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