Thank you for the feedback. I am going to write out the outline before I write the story and leave the logline until the end. I didn't realise that I had to do the logline after the script. Also, I will leave that bit out of my welcome post.CART, HORSE!
I just realized in your Welcome post you said you always write the logline first, and you only have a logline in this instance.
There's nothing wrong with using this as a technique to come up with the basis of your story, but it's pointless to ask us for feedback on a logline you have no script for. No I am not discouraging your process but...
Go ahead and write your logline if it helps you brainstorm your idea
Then start writing your script
Rewrite
Rewrite
Rewrite
Rewrite again
Look at your logline. Does it still make sense?
Write another if not
NOW ask for logline feedback
What you are asking is, "What do you think of the slogan, Coke is it!" When you have no cola recipe.
Thank you mlesemann. That is what my story is actually about. It was the terrorists part that had me stumped. I am going to write out the outline now.When terrorists take over her restaurant, a waitress fears she may not live to be her sister's maid of honor.
As Our Founder said, you don't have to do anything in any order.I didn't realise that I had to do the logline after the script.
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As Our Founder said, you don't have to do anything in any order.
The logline is really for "selling" purposes. I don't even think of it until my
script is finished and I'm looking for a producer (or agent) to read it.
I never write an outline or treatment either. Doesn't mean you shouldn't.
Just write. Sounds like you have an interesting story. Get to it!
is the hardest part, when the idea is still pretty vague, even if some very detailed scenes have been sketched out ...you can tell us about your idea in a couple words or sentences