Following up. So I worked with the kids, they helped come up with the idea and did some writing. We did some filming today, having a great time...
LogLine:
A trio of crime fighting sisters must rescue their mother from Dr. Cookie and his assistant Cupcake before its too late.
Title: Fists Of Dough
Here is a preview.. just a few of the scenes we shot today.. not much of the story but pretty cute..
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Heres the script: about 7 hours work.
EXT. HOME PORCH MORNING
The old house is noisy with squabbling children as MOM, dressed in jogging outfit shuts the door behind her and lightly moves down the porch steps. She puts the ear buds in her ears and presses play on the iPod. She jogs out the gate and down the road.
EXT. DESERTED HWY MORNING
Kim is stopped along the side of the road, stretching her back as she rests for a moment. A van screeches to a halt, spraying gravel, the side door flies open. Hands reach out and snatch MOM into the dark interior. The van door slams shut and the van races away.
INT. INNER SANCTUM
Mom is tied to a simple chair. A bare bulb lights here face as it swings in the otherwise darkened room. DR. COOKIE leans in close to her face.
DR. COOKIE
Tell me the recipe, NOW!
MOM
Never!
Dr. Cookie turns away, his back to Mom.
DR. COOKIE
We shall see, we shall see...
INT. INNER SANCTUM LATTER
Dr. Cookie stands with his back to Mom who is tied to the chair. CUPCAKE approaches Dr. Cookie.
CUPCAKE
She will never tell us Dr. Cookie
DR. COOKIE
I know, I know...
CUPCAKE
I'm tired of waiting, Its time for plan B!
INT. HOME FRONT ROOM-DAY
KARATE (teenage girl), CHOP(teenage girl) and KICKS(a tween girl) are sitting on the sofa watching TV. Their heads SNAP in the direction of the front door.
CHOP
You get that
KARATE
No, I just got my nails done.
Chop heaves a sigh, Karate and Chop look at each other
KARATE & CHOP
Kicks!
Kicks gets up with a sigh and goes to the door. She returns excitedly.
KICKS
You Guys, look at this.
INSERT RANSOM NOTE
IN CRAYON BLOCK PRINTING:
If you ever want to see your mother again, bring the Brownie Recipe to my compound before its too late.
hugs and kisses.
Dr. Cookie
KICKS
What are we going to do?
The three stare at each other..
CHOP
Wait, I have an idea..
INT. HOME KITCHEN - LATTER
The trio surrounds a map spread out on the table. Karate points and gestures and Kicks. Kicks nods her head. Chop points to another location on the map looks at Kicks, who rolls her eyes then nods her head. Karate lifts her hand to point at Kicks.
KICKS
Ah COME ON! Do I have to do EVERYTHING!
KARATE
OK then, that's the plan
Chop turns and runs towards the stairs
CHOP
Karate! Don't just stand there! Come help me pick out an outfit!
The two teenagers run up the stairs.
EXT. RIDGE OVERLOOKING COMPOUND-Day
The two teen age fashion conscious girls, Karate and Chop, dressed in colorful stylish outfits completely inappropriate for the rough terrain are seated in camp chairs. A cooler is open between them. Karate has binoculars up to her eyes. Chop is applying sunblock to her arms. An ice filled glass with soda sits in the cup holder at her side.
KARATE
Chop.. moisture me.
Chop picks up the drink and places the end of the bendy straw between Karate's lips. Karate slurps loudly
KARATE
ah, that was close
Chop returns the glass to its holder and continues applying lotion.
INT. INNER SANCTUM
Mom is tied to the chair, Dr. Cookie is pacing and Cupcake is making a batch of cookies in the EZ BAKE oven.
MOM
Why are you doing this?
DR. COOKIE
Why? Ill tell you why.. When I was six years old, my father brought home a cute puppy, but then..
(TIME PASSES)
....and she was like.. DUH, and I was like OK.. and she said NOWAY and I was all WAY
(TIME PASSES)
Ola pourvavor all that is left is to agree on the price... hahah
(TIME PASSES)
and so you see, that is why I am doing this..
MOM
You'll never get away with it..
DR. COOKIE
When your children arrive, you will sing to a differ drummer...
MOM
What?
Mom shakes her had as Dr. Cookie smooths his hair.
EXT. COMPOUND BARN ENTRANCE-DAY
A guard patrols the compound entrance near the barn. Kicks creeps up behind him. CHOP! her hand comes down on the guards neck and he collapses in an unconscious heap. She removes his security badge and key card
INT. COMPOUND BARN-Moments LATTER
The barn interior is disguised with stacks of hay bales. An obtrusive card reader is attached to the wall. Kicks swipes the key card in the card reader, the wall of HAY BALES slides to reveal the secret door way.
INT. COMPOUND ALARM SHACK-LATTER
Kicks detaches the device from the alarm control panel. She pulls out a mobile phone and dials.
Kicks
Objective complete, the alarm is disabled, meet me at checkpoint Zulu.
Kicks snaps the phone shut
EXT. RIDGE OVERLOOKING COMPOUND-DAY
Karate is reclining in her camp chair. Dark sunglasses conceal her eyes. Chop snaps a cell phone shut.
CHOP
Shes in, time to move out!
KARATE
Wait...
Karate takes a final sip from the drink straw
KARATE
OK, I'm ready
Chop
Lets go bake that cookie dough..
KARATE
What is that supposed to mean?
Chop shrugs
CHOP
Whatever, lets go..
Karate and Chop pick there way down the rocky path. There high heal shoes slipping and making their progress painfully slow
INT. APPROACH TO INNER SANCTUM DOOR
Kicks, Karate and Chop, backs pressed against the wall near a closed door.
KARATE
I have a bad feeling about this..
CHOP
Take a Midol, lets go!
The trio pull the door open and rush inside
INT. APPROACH TO INNER SANCTUM HALL-MOMENTS LATER
The trio stand at one end of the long room, at the other end Dr. Cookie and CUPCAKE stand ready to attack. Cupcake holds a HUGE barred gun.
Kicks
Its a trap!
Cookies are flying. The trio dodge and weave, kicking and chopping cookies out of the air as they move with determined speed towards their nemeses. Their stylish hair blowing back dramatically. Kicks is rolling and diving. Chops orthodontic braces shatter a cookie on impact. Dust fills the air, crumbs are exploding, and sparks are flying as the barrage of cookies continues. Cupcake is cycling round after round into the HUGE cookie shotgun. Shick Shuck BOOM, Shick Shuk BOOM BOOM BOOM.. Dr. Cookie is throwing the cookies like Chinese stars! The trio moves steadily closer. Cupcake and Dr. Cookie continue sending cookies towards the enemy. The trio steps to withing a foot of their opponents. The barrage does not let up.
Karate dives for cover. Chop pairs off to duel with Cupcake, Kicks takes on Dr. Cookie.
INT. INNER SANCTUM
Dr. Cookies and Kicks trade wild hay maker swings. Each impossible blow causing the others head to snap to the side...
INT. INNER SANCTUM
Chop and Cupcake square off. Each letting out there fighting war cry
CHOP
ARHHHHHHHH
CUPCAKE
GRRRRRRRRR
CHOP
AHHHHHHHHH
CUPCAKE
GRRRRRRRRR
CHOP
AHHHHHHHH
Cupcake attacks with her "supper cute" look
CHOP
oh.. your so cute
CUPCAKE
hugs?
Chop and Cupcake embrace, but then SMACK Cupcake deal a devastating blow to Chops shin! Chop falls to the the ground in agony. Cupcake steps back, hands on her hips, throws her head back and laughs.
CHOP
I'm Down, I'm down..
Chops eyes flutter as a tear rolls down her check. Karate rushes to her side, and cradles Chops head in her lap.
KARATE
Don't you give up, cmon were almost done
CHOP
no.. I cant.. you go on, I cant make it..
KARATE
..but Chop, I don't..
CHOP
shh, my little Chamberlein, everything will be OK... now avenge me...AVENGE ME
Karate throws her head back in grief
KARATE
Nooooooooooooo!
Karate stand up quickly, Chops head smacks into the hard concrete
CHOP
ouch...
Karate stands over the fallen Chop and fixes her gaze on Cupcake
INT. INNER SANCTUM
Karate stands, hand on hips glaring at Cupcake who's stands, hands on hips glaring back.
KARATE
Your a naughty little girl!
Cupcakes face falls, her lower lip trembles, and her eyes well up with tears
CUPCAKE
...but, I don't want to be bad, I want to be good...
Karate looks doubtful
KARATE
If you want to be good then DO SOMETHING GOOD, help me rescue my mommy.
Cupcake nods yes, and beams a smile, the two rush to Mothers side
INT. INNER SANCTUM
Kicks, Karate and Cupcake meet at Moms chair, they work to untie her, she is free.
Kicks
come on mom, lets go home
Mom
..wait, where is your sister?
KARATE
I'm here mom, oh my gosh, shes been blinded.. NOOOOOOO
MOM
Karate, I can see you just fine, where is your OTHER sister...
KARATE
Chop? Oh, she didn't make it.
CHOP (o.s.)
I'm here, its not that bad.. just give me a hand up...
Mom
Nooooo
KARATE
Nooooo
CUPCAKE
Nooooo
Cupcake shrugs
KICKS
guys, shes right there, geeze..
Karate and Kicks support Mom as they leave the Inner Sanctum. Cupcake is holding Karate's hand.
CHOP(o.s.)
guys? Where are you going, come on give me a hand.. I'm ok.. I just..
The group exists the Inner Sanctum
EXT. COMPOUND BARN ENTRANCE-DAY
Eyes streaming with tears, each face a mask of grief, Mom, Karate, Kicks and Cupcake lurch outside into the bright sunshine limping and holding each other. Mom breaks away her eyes following Dr. Cookie as he makes his escape on his bicycle.
Mom
Get up, we have to stop him before its too late.
Karate rounds on Mom
KARATE
Mom, we just lost our sister give us some time to grieve
CHOP (O.S.)
hello.. I'm here... I'm crawling as fast as I can.. don't leave yet
MOM
You don't understand, if we don't stop him now, he will be too powerful, we can grieve when the world is safe..
KARATE
Your right, Dry your eyes little ones, Karate, Chop and Kicks are ON THE CASE
KICKS
uh.. Chop is gone??
KARATE
whatever
Karate, Kicks, Cupcake and Mom stand arm in arm, watching as Dr. Cookie races off.
THE END