I think it looked pretty good, and you had a lot of sound design in terms of music and cues, however, I think the audio in terms of the dialog is pretty bad though, and it pulls me out of the larger production value thing you're going for. I'd say clean up the dialog a lot...do some ADR if you have to. It sounds like you recorded with a really bad mic.
Good job with the pacing and the flow...
I think you're actors are OK, but none of them really have that 'it' factor, even the lead dude is a little humdrum. I take it none of them are actors...well, if you plan to continue this, they will need to up their game quite a bit...at least if you plan to sell this thing. In time, they will improve...just keep in mind how hard real actors work (classes, training, constant practice), and then you'll understand why having non-actors carry your show can be a weak link. And although Entourage has younger actors in it, I think some of your actors are *too* young, and suffer from that 'friend-made' look.
I hope you understand this critique is meant to help, not hinder. You guys have put a ton of work into this, and it shows.