watch Critiques on my short video

[laurenvictoria]

Its for my freshman film class at emerson
The assignment was pretty loose, basically just a montage put to music.

https://vimeo.com/51495826

Thanks

 

[Zensteve]

First, you lose some points for not mailing me a piece of that delicious cake after the shoot.

Found it oddly sad at the end, which was weird 'cos I thought it was essentially a "how to bake a cake" fluff piece for the majority of it.

Lighting was flat. Didn't care so much for the heavy DoF emphasis. Heck, at some points half her body's in focus, and the other half not.

I'd have dumped all the ambient sound aside from a special match-flare, 'cos that was pretty important. Aside from that one unique sound, the rest of the ambient noise in the room is just random bits here & there, and actually a bit distracting from the mellow music on top.

Well, all that's just my opinion.

Nice job overall.

 

[laurenvictoria]

Thanks! I appreciate it. Yea the lighting sucked because i was just using the light from the window and a lamp.

thanks again!

 

[Ernest Worthing]

The best thing I see here is that you are getting a hang of how action is shown in film with different cuts and angles instead of keeping the same shot going for too long as most people do.

 

[laurenvictoria]

Sweet! thanks. Yea if anything this video was a learning experience