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Character names mentioned too many times...

While working on one of my short scripts I noticed that I tend to repeat a character's name more than once or twice when describing what's happening.
I was wondering about the best way to make sure the reader knows who is doing what in the scene without repeating the names of the characters too often.

Here is an example out of the script:

Code:
The man on the floor is JACOB. The Psychopath forces Jacob's mouth open,
and pours liquor down his throat. Jacob coughs and turns over onto his stomach. 
The Psychopath looks down at Jacob with an evil glint in his eye.
 
Usually when introducing a character for the first time it's good to describe a couple physical traits of said character. Is jacob 80 years old? 16?

etc


In these line heres

'the Psychopath forces Jacob's mouth open,
and pours liquor down his throat. Jacob coughs and turns over onto his stomach."

The first sentence uses jacob as the him/his pronoun so you can continue that into the second sentence too and the reader won't be confused.

'The Psychopath forces Jacob's mouth open,
and pours liquor down his throat. He coughs and turns over onto his stomach.'

But there is nothing wrong with using names too often in description if you feel like there may be confusion.
 
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