Logline:
A gentleman and man of intrigue comes home to find that the bulter is not as he seems, and he must use his wits to outsmart an evil organization that threatens the empire as well as his own family.
I started working on this before I saw your wishlist. I was going in the cyberpunk direction with this. I'm beginning to fear that I'm useless when it come to short stories. I was hoping to punch out
a few short screenplay options, silly me, but here I am struggling with just this one and first attempt. I'm not complaining. Hurts so good, if you know what I mean.
I'll tell you straight out though, I do not as yet have the story all mapped out or figured out. Actually, it's busting my...well, you get the drift. So far, it lacks the ooo/ahhh factor for me. I'm trying to hammer that out.
I was trying to be mindful of microbudget realities. I think that what I have in mind is doable on a microbudget. But yeah, it would be demanding. Victiorian houses are a dime a dozen around here, so to speak. I did make a cursory google for that, as far as Oregon goes, last night. Looks like they are there too. Well, I don't envy the producer (you?) who would have to get the permission of say, a block of Victorian-house-owning-homeowners in order to get that opening bicycle scene, but seems like it could be done. I was thinking that a person could shoot that at such an angle that the modern asphalt or concrete street etc would not show up in the frame. Not ideal. But possible? Otherwise, that could be nixed. Bigsby could simply arrive at his house. But you know, I have no idea if Victorian folks in England actually lived in Victorian houses, heheh. He could also be walking instead of riding, if a Victorian Age bicycle was too difficult to come by. I think I just like the imagery of him coming in on a Victorian Age bike. Speaking of anachronisms, I was also wondering if even little Victorian girls were allowed to ride bicycles. I'd have to try to look that up. If not, that part of the dialogue, I suppose, ought to be nixed. Also, were Victorian Age neighborhoods in England anything like those that we still see in America today? Such a neighborhood would probably just not look urban enough, or something? Oh well, let me continue to explain my silly fantasy of a short film anyway. It should probably be set in or near London, or some significant metropolis in England. Does it matter?
Maybe not in your town, but it does look like there are museums and bed & breakfast places housed in old Victorian mansions in Oregon. Perhaps one of those would allow you to at least shoot the exterior scenes at their place?
For whatever it's worth, this is what I was working on. It's definately a rough, work-in-progress and far from finished script. I'm not holding my breath, and nor should you, that it will turn out to be a well rounded short story. I know that that's not a very serious sales pitch. But, this isn't Hollywood, thankfully, and I'd like to think that we're all more-or-less friends here. So what the heck. It's
okay if it's not a serious contender. I'm glad just to fool around with it.
Proto Cyberpunk? Screenplay
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Wheat, thanks for taking a look despite the
fade in, and thank you for your feedback. =)
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Anything to do with the deep woods, a rocky coastline and a rural setting reminds me of New England. Ah... home.