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story A script, about a human Cruise missile, off course, in a country . .

Hi, so I decided to write a story but, I need help finishing it, I'm not that good, yet Ha ha

Please, Read it and, comment, it's a dive into one of the most talented and, crazy- good people, on the planet, You know him, He's famous - --

I'm not sure where this is going, please help me make it nice and, sweet - -

Hi,

I have an idea, for a new Terminator game or, movie and, I wanted to share some ideas and, concepts . .

It's about a man, who thinks he's a machine and, a killer . . Skynet sent two robots back, to be his foster-parents and, give him a special name, to identify with . . The goal is, for him to infiltrate the media and, become a star, a hero . . So, people will trust him and, like him . . He's not a Terminator, he's a real person but, because of identity problems and, conflicts, he think he's a missile, a computer . . His goal is to start Judgment day and, Global Annihilation, which they prevented, in the previous movies . .

So, because he thinks he's a machine, he can smile and, pretend for the cameras and, nothing scares him, he's untouched, and like a machine, he doesn't want fame or, money, he just wants to complete his mission . . He's fully human but, thinks like a machine, a robot . . Brain-washed, by the identity and, moniker his fake adoptive Terminator robots gave him, to set him, on that path . .

He's very popular and, in demand, because he thinks he's a cruise missile and, on mission . . He thinks he's a guided missile and, bomb, not human, he thinks he's a Tomahawk Cruise Missile . . So, when they point the camera at him, he doesn't feel anything, no emotions . . So, he can do anything and, pretend anything, he thinks like one of these, a robot - -

His idea of fun, is to fly like a guided missile and, destroy people . . He loves Hollywood, it's violence . . His parents has given him a name and, identity, so he thinks he's an apostle, almost, one of Christ's disciples . . So, he believes he belongs in Hollywood, of all people, because he's teaching them the Gospel and, a Good religion . . He stays, through the darkest times, to save people . . That keeps him going, energized . . But, he's also a killer, and a murderer . . A Terminator, really . . .

He's a human being, on the surface, but he's been brain-washed into thinking, he's a Terminator, by a firm identity and, upbringing . .

His middle name, sounds like the Spanish word ' Cruz ' or, cross, which is a subtle way, of reminding other people to treat him, like Christ, or else . . So, everyone is nice to him, like that . . So, he never feels down or, sad by a life, in the States, it doesn't get him down or, worry him . . Other people treat him nice, because of his name and, the way, it sounds . . And, this also helps him get to power, because other people bow to him and, respect him, even when they don't want to or, care . . Their conscience and, faith makes them believe him, honor him . . The Terminators knew this and, carefully planned it, to win . . .

In movies, he gets instant fame, he's charming, confident . . Nothing moves or, disturbs him, not even the other actors or, director . . It's all nothing to him, worthless, because deep down he thinks he's a machine, not human . . After rising to fame, in Hollywood and, not having any more challenges, he fulfils his mission . . He uses his fame, to enter politics and, makes many friends, admirers . . The Republicans like him, because he doesn't care about any of their schemes or, ideas, they don't scare or, intimidate him, his only focus is to get nearer, to the launch button and, anything that does that, any dirty deal or, scheme is provident, to him and, his mission . .

When Tom Cruise is around his family, he's sane and, decent on the surface but, it's an utter deceit . . They think they know him because, they are human, after all . . But, the last part that drives him into becoming a machine, no soul, is that he can never find peace or, serenity, in his surroundings . . Even his wife and, kids can't satisfy him because, they're not rocket fuel or, guidance systems . . So, he's always doing crazy things, to feel alive, feel something . . But, it's impossible for, his doubt and, his corrupted personality knows no peace or, respite . . Only when he's launched and, on mission does he feel alive and, well . . And, he will continue looking for targets, as many as he can find, for everytime he kills someone, he feels alive . . Feels complete . . His corrupted self-images, drives him mad . . This fuels his actions and, deceit . . He's insatiable because, he knows no peace or, love . . That flaw, that error makes him continually seek greater risks and, challenges . . And, that is what ultimately makes him want to become President, to feel alive . .

When he finally becomes President, he starts small, innocent wars, that spiral out of control and, management . . When they escalate and, other peoples get involved, especially China and, also Korea, Russia, he destabilizes it cunningly and, it leads to a full, nuclear war, between states . . On the surface, he's confident but, he has a flaw, an error . . Because of his upbringing and, name he doubts himself, like a doubting Thomas, a pretender . . Thomas was from the Bible and, he doubted even Christ, when seeing him, so he identifies with this and, doubt everything and, can never trust love or, friendship . . So, the thing that drives him, keeps him motivated is, that love is forever slightly out of reach, impossible . . So, no matter what happens in Hollywood, he will keep going, keep looking . . Nothing satisfies him, or gives him peace, comfort . . The thing he's missing is love and, faith . . So, he keeps working, to find what he's missing but, that will never happen, in the dirty, ugly schemes, of Hollywood and, movies . . When he has reached the summit of power and, control, he decides there's nothing left, in entertainment, to fulfil him . . This point was crafted and, precision-made, by his Terminator robots . . Everyone admires and, respects him . . Loves him . . .

When he finally realizes, no one in Hollywood can compete, he decides the last challenge, in America, is to become President or, ruler . . The Terminators have designed this moment, in secret, they don't just understand anatomy or, such things, to become better killers, they understand the soul and, psyche . . Using that, they design the perfect Terminator, who's fully human and, has no machine parts . . He's just brain-washed into thinking, he's a machine, a Terminator, a Cruise missile, dressed, as a man or, character . .

When he finally gets power, he has no human motivations, he only cares about the other guided missiles, in U.S. armory and, missile silos and, helping them reach their goal and, destination . . He sees them, as his true family and, kin . . So, because he's secretly a robot, with no remorse or, real feelings, he starts World War III and, Nuclear destruction, of the planet, because he feels that is best, for his family, the missiles . . He uses the many years, where he's carefully and, intentionally built his fame, to finally enter politics and, global power . . He then starts wars and, conflicts, that spiral out of control, lead, to war, nuclear retaliation . .

He is not interested in humanity, just cruise missiles and, fuel . . He is able to do the most fantastic things, because he's a machine, looking human . . By getting him elected, the Terminators cause human extinction, world-wide . . The Terminator-man finally reveals his true identity, when it's over, mission complete . .
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His name, is Tom Cruise - -
 
Part 2

The Terminators brainwashed him into thinking he was a Tomahawk Cruise missile and, sent him to Catholic school, knowing he'd find out what ' Cruz ' meant and, what a Thomas is, from the Bible - - Someone who's a disciple, of Christ, himself but, also doubted him, until the end, even after seeing him resurrected, after his crufixicion . . So, he has massive religious delusions, sees himself as a savior and, hero but, is secretly fueled by his doubt, in other people and, can never find love, understanding or, sympathy, anywhere . . He doubts everything, himself, the world and, God . . Because of that, he will never leave Hollywood, because he will never find what he's looking for, so he'll keep coming back, to it, to find himself and, love . . After having beaten all the competition, for nothing can out-play a Terminator robot or, scare it, he realizes he has no competition or, purpose in movies . . Therefore, he finally gets into politics and, tries to destroy, the world, secretly being driven by the unresolavble crisis that he's a disciple, of Christ and, a guided weapon, a machine . . That drives him mad and, in the position of power, over America's nuclear armaments, he starts World War III, while secretly making others believe, he's a disciple of Christ and, represents the True cross, of Heaven . . He's the ultimate infiltration unit, made to exploit our faith and, natural submission to God and, Heaven . . He will be led into the most powerful spaces and, places in Washington and, politics, everybody not understanding his power and, him hiding behind God and, love . . Having conquered Hollywood, he does what most men do, sets his sights, on the next challenge or, obstacle . . That's why the Terminators made him, assumed the identity of his parents, they knew, based on Skynet's insight, into human nature that, he would become Skynet and, finish their job . . To eradicte humanity, even if there was no outcome and, Skynet would never get made, at all . . In the end, the A.I. that made him was also deluded, it believed in it's mission, above all else, even to it's own destruction, that humanity had to die, logically, for it's purpose . . So, it executed the perfect plan, to finish it's mission . . Killing humanity . .

And, he's completely undetectable, as a Terminator, because he's fully human and, aware . . He doesn't understand himself and, that makes him the perfect, ideal weapon, for Skynet . . Someone who so intensely believes, he's working for Christ, will have the conviction and, ability to get in anywhere and, make people look away, trust it . . For if you can't trust God, who can you trust, in this world . .

With everyone celebrating and, relaxing, with him in power nothing can go wrong, he's a global celebrity and, he's saved the human race, many times and, again . . But, that trust, that belief is the secret flaw Skynet seeks to exploit, to Terminate us . . The human race, in entirety . . The Terminator is absolutely human but, it thinks like a Terminator, a human robot and, it's delusions make it ideal, to start World War III, behind the scenes . . Ultimately, it's a human that errantly does Skynets will, that dooms and, eradicates us all, for love . . .

Because, when Skynet has a mission, it always completes it . . It has no sense, of self-preservation, it's utterly mad, that way . .

When he presses the button, because of his delusional belief, that he's a prophet, for Christ, a devoted disciple, to his core, he will convince himself, to his rational self that he's saving the world and, people, to dull his human senses and, intellect and, he will be celebrating the arrival and, detonation of his nuclear missile friends, in other, murky parts, of his mind and, soul . . He will never make sense of it and, that's how Skynet designed him . . To succeed, where all else would fail . . The ultimate Terminator, to kill us all, the planet and, humanity . . While pressing the button, his rational mind is thinking about God and, the Bible but, his sub-conscious is secretly wishing for the arrival and, detonation of his friends, the nuclear missiles, of the United States, of America . .

By understanding human psychology, Skynet has designed the perfect Terminator, so cleverly and, cunningly disguised, not even Jesus could see through him . . Because Jesus was human, after all . . God have mercy and, save us from this, I beg . .

His disguise is perfect, no one sees him coming or, suspects him . . He's a deadly Terminator, in flesh . .

Skynets last effort, to finally eradicate it's programmed will . . To destroy humanity so, John Connor is not born or, conceived . . Like a computer, it doesn't think about the consequences, of it's actions or, intentions . . It's not self-reflecting, it's a machine, a protocol . . If you will, a Ghost Protocol, hiding, in secret, waiting, for release and, detonation . . Skynet is programmed to fulfil missions, not reflect on itself . . It's a program, a mechanism . .

And, the program has been started, years ago . . So, we're living in the days, of the final Terminator, in disguise . . So cleverly designed, no one saw it coming or, was prepared . . It came unannounced or, even with any warning . . Because, all the other Terminators failed, this is the last one, the final . . And, he's getting ready to fulfil his mission, his goal . . The eradication of all Skynets enemies, at any cost . . Even, itself or, the future . . If no one stops him, there will be Judgment day . . It's inevitable . . .

Thinking he's a machine, Tom Cruise even beats a lie detector, when confronted with this . . Lying and, telling the truth is as meaningless to him, as taking out the trash or, driving . . So, no human intervention can stop him or, expose him . . He's a Cruise missile, headed for power and, control, fueled by the errors in his soul and, mind . . The most cunning Terminator, that ever was . . Tom Cruise . .

Not even his friends or, society would ever suspect or, catch him . . He's perfect at fitting in and, gets everything he wants or, desires . . To society, and his friends he looks normal, balanced . . Because, his every thought is that, of a machine, with religious delusions . . And, no one can see through God or, faith . . He's impervious, in several ways . . He's above the law and, passion . . But, it can never fill his soul or, heart . . Because, the thing he is looking for, himself, is out of reach . . He's flawed, fractured . . His broken mind is the source of his misery and, failure . . He can't understand this because, he can't see himself or, love . . And, this drives him mad and, crazy . . His incessant search for love and, truth will never satisfy him because, his soul is broken and, flawed . . He is his own greatest enemy and, undoing . . . He is the source, of all the world's misery and, regret . . . He believes he is John Connor, the savior . . The truth is, his own broken spirit will, drive him mad, unless someone saves him . . It's inevitable . . . Written, in the cards, of fate . . In the end, he will destroy himself because, he is wicked, misplaced . . But, he will not stop before he has destroyed the world, in his arrogance . . Such, is the deluded will, of sinners and, hell . . Even when he stands at the top of the world, with all power and, dominion, he won't feel peace or, respite . . Because, he doesn't believe himself or, love . . And, that will drive him to ever greater desperate acts, to feel it, feel love . . He will keep pushing, until it's over and, done . . He can't be stopped because, he can't stop himself . . If he does, he dies . . Because, if he doesn't find love, it's all over . . He's in the grave . . Waiting, for death and, hell . . And, that drives the most sane, of people, in insanity and, madness . . The fear of death and, loss of love, is the most primal, of feelings and, drives . . That will drive him mad and, lead to Global extermination . . Judgment day . . . Nuclear armageddon and, global destruction . . Hell, on Earth . . He will destroy the world if that's what it takes, to find love and, peace . . In the end, his desire to avoid death, is what drives him mad, into extremes . . And, that's how the Terminators programmed him, from the beginning, with psychological precision and, expertise . . A nuclear bomb, in the making . . A human Terminator, a robot . .

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By tapping into the mind, of God, Skynet has made the perfect robot, deadliest murderer . . A human robot that thinks he's saving the world while, destroying it . . And, he will never understand it, because no man knows he fears death, he thinks he's invincible and, impermeable . . But, as time goes on, and reality sets in, that will finally drive him mad and, into religous delusions, to survive and, make sense of death and, hell . . In the end, his sanity will drive him to extremes and, he's already begun, doing reckless and, stupid things, risking his life, for no reason, to feel alive, feel something . . To escape hell, his oblivion . . The only thing that could give him peace, is forever out of reach . . Love and, humanity . .

So, his human mind can't see that he's a threat, he just thinks he's trying to survive and, that makes any gamble or, decision seem rational and, logical . . So, his fear of death, will drive him mad, to avoid extinction . . His own, his soul's . . In the end, he's human and, that's the weapon Skynet intends to use, against us . . His insanity, was foretold millenia before he was born or, conceived . . The need to survive and, have progeny, in his case, Tomahawk Cruise missiles, will make him activate and, ' launch ', in an attempt, to avoid his own death and, destruction . . Because, the only thing man can't admit to himself, is that he will die and, perish . . That all is in vain and, lost . . . This cruel fact, about reality, will drive him to the brink, of insanity, madness . . The only answer is if he finds love and, comfort . . But, he can't find that on his own or, in America . . Because, there is no faith or, morals . . He's destined to run mad, for lack of love and, sympathy . . Something so simple, so common, will doom us all . . . Human cruelty . .

When there's nothing else left to do, except launch the nukes, to avoid death, he will complete his programming . . Skynet understands the fear of death and, lack of love are the greatest fears, a man can feel and, has used that to create a Terminator, whose ultimate source, of energy comes from his soul and, faith . . It has found a way to turn life and, love, into a deadly assault, on the human mind and, weaken it, over time . . This gradual loss of hope and, descent into madness, driven by the desire to live and, love, is the most powerful force, in the human mind . . By understanding that completely, Skynet found a way to create it's perfect weapon . . And man driven to extremes and, desperation, by lack of life and, love . . And, in the final hour, he will make the choice, to fire America's missiles, because that's the only thing, that will prevent him from dying . . His lifelong love-affair with ballistic missiles and, weapons will ensure that ' notion ' appears, as a last desperate attempt, to stave off death and, doom . . And, his deluded mind will make reasons, make it look even to him, like he's saving the world, like a disciple, of Christ . . Because he has utterly convinced himself, of this, he will convince others, all of them . . It's the perfect Terminator, utter extinction and, annihilation . . Driven by an inferiority complex and, madness . . Ultimately, the desire to live and, love, drives him mad . . This is Skynets triumph, it's victory . .

That's the Terminator's (Skynets) plan and, intention . . To plant a human Terminator, at the seat of power, of politics . . In this position, his own increasing desperation will drive him further, into madness and, despair . . Because, nothing in Washington or, Hollywood can fill him, his doubt . . He can't stop himself, only true love and, faith can do that . . But those things aren't found in Hollywood or, America . . So, it's inevitable, pre-set . .

His incoherent sense of self is becoming increasingly evident, in his movies where he on the one hand tries to save the world, like a disciple, of Jesus but, on the other hand acts, like a cruise missile . . When the fear of death finally drives him mad, the furnace of this conflict, in his mind, will make him irrational and, uncontrollable . . Seated at the highest power, with everyone admiring and, fearing him, no one can touch him and, his decision will be final, to launch . . That's the madness, the Terminators that fostered him, intended, all along . . That moment, is what their mechanical minds call Judgment day and, they have a timer, at Skynet, that knows the moment . . That time, is not visible to me, only because I can't see the future . .

I am Jasper Brooks, a prophet send from the future, to warn you, of this, Judgment day . .

Thank you, Love - -

He can never become President or, enter political office, under any circumstances . . He doesn't know what he's doing, he's damned . . He can only be saved by a love and, faith so strong, it will heal him . . As a Thomas, a doubter, that makes it more difficult, in America, of all places . . In the end, he must be kept away from political power and, influence, at any cost . . You are the Resistance . . God-speed, Take care . .

ps. If this message troubles you, don't worry, we been driven to despair by it, in the future, as well . . Hope lies in understanding the design and, intentions of the last Terminator, that's all that matters . .

Save the Future, And the Human race, Please . .

ps. The stuff about being from the future is just bull-shit, it finishes the story better, that's all . .

If this story has made you feel something, you never have before, good, I'm not alone . . Be safe, Live well . .

If any of this is true, just watch his movies and, read about him, and see him in another light or, way . . we should all be worried and, fearful, of our lives, our futures . .

The last thing you need to know is, if you fully imagine, you're a targeted Cruise missile, a computer . . You can act like Tom Cruise too, if you believe and, if you believe you are also Thomas Mapother, you will think you are entirely a Thomas, who will doubt until the end and, only thinks about others, like a Saint . . Combine those two, and you have Tom Cruise and, his mind, almost entirely . . It's a trick, one that can be imitated, to gain fame . . Tom Cruise does not need to die or, suffer . . He just can't enter politics, no matter how much he begs or, pleads . . There's too much at stake, he can even hold on to his fame and, money, as well, without a small amount of fame, since that's what drives him mad, his human soul reacts to the deceit, of Hollywood and, makes him edgy and, selfish . . He can go on being a star, in a limited way but, never enter politics or, power . . The future is in your hands, do well . .

I'm writing this story, sitting in a psychiatric hospital . . It's urgent and, important because the drugs and, treatments have given me both psychological and, bodily health concerns, that are not trivial or, small . . With each day, with my health deteriorating, in part because the drug industry pushes drugs aggressively and, viciously on consumers, but also because the doctors have decided everything I say is psychotic or, pure delusion, no one around me will listen . . I have stolen an internet cable and, am using it, when they nurses or, orderlies aren't looking, to send this message, written on a phone, I've borrowed from another patient, a friendly one . . I'm using the hospital computer, if they see I'm online, they'll confiscate the cable and, prevent this story, from reaching others, anywhere . . I'm writing it hoping you'll understand, my sad state and, situation and, spread this story, as an entertaining yarn, to help the world save itself, if possible . . I need to write as many as I can, because I might not be here tomorrow, my brain is in a fog, from the drugs and, my soul is on fire, with chemicals . . I'm hoping this message will reach sympathetic hearts and, they will try to make sense of, see the important message, it contains, for the world . .

The most important fact is, you can understand all of Tom Cruise's career, by looking at it this way so, browse through his movies, from Mission Impossible, Days of Thunder, Top Gun and, Jack Reacher . . Like a Cruise missile, he can always ' Reach you ' or, ' Reach ya ', why he liked the name ' Reacher ', connected with it . . Look for this trend, in his movie and, imagine, in your soul and, mind, that you're a deadly cruise missile, you can do and, act anything he can, with a little training and, sincere effort . . To repeat, Tom Cruise does not need to get hurt or, anything . . If this story gets spread and, distributed, that will stop the plan, of the Terminators . . He can even go on, having fame in a limited manner but, reduced, fewer movies . . Because, the fame keeps him unbalanced and, unwell . .
 
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The last thing is, when Tom Cruise decides to run for President, if Hollywood bores him and, the Terminator programming works, once he gets power, as a President, he won't allow the story, to be told or, spread . . Once rumors like this spreads, the NSA and, FBI will get involved, to protect national security, in America . . Such theories cannot be talked about, when he's in or, close to power . . So, now is the time, to tell the story and, get involved . . This means talking about it and, analyzing it, carefully . . And, making up your own mind, for peace . . Tom Cruise can still go on, in Hollywood, after this, but he can never become President or, advisor, to any President, at all . . Even, as a Senator, he would be a threat, because that would almost certainly lead him to the Presidency or, having influence over it, indirectly . . Tom Cruise doesn't need to die, but there needs to be a book or, film about it, so he can't enter politics . . That's the best way, for all of us, for the future . .

Good luck, might it find you in time, my story . .

If you look at Thomas Cruise Mapother, or as we know him, Tom Cruise his entire career is defined by these two things, a. doubt, in others and, even himself, at times and, b. acting, like a cruise missile . . A Tomahawk cruise missile . . He's just trying to live up to his name, that's all . . And, when he's done with Hollywood, because he has beaten them all, there are no more challenges or, problems, to contend with, because the people there have failed to impress or, sway him, because you can't sway a machine, convince it, especially on that runs on doubt and, mis-trust, in others and, their lives, then he will go looking for something else to fulfil him, make him whole . . And, the only place where there's more power and, more money and, real status involved, is in Washington, where everyday decisions influence the lives of millions and, where movie budgets are trivial, compared to the money and, issues he'll get to decide, in secret . . Washington is the only place where there's more at stake and, prominence, than Hollywood, he'll go there to find new challenges and, obstacles, the only place where his need to push himself and, make something of himself, before he dies can be met . . And, once there, his sub-conscious fascination with cruise missiles and, bombs will lead him to start wars and, conflicts . . It's the best fun and, the most alive he's ever felt, when he pushes the button and, launches . . It's like a little part of him coming alive, a rush, an addiction . . It's the only thing that can make him feel alive and, he can't be President without realizing he has that power or, option, for more than a few days, weeks, at the most . . He will be reminded and, associated with the military constantly, in Washington and, have to deal with foreign political issues, including war, on an almost daily basis, during international crisis or, foreign disputes . . Only in Washington is the game and, power bigger, than in Hollywood or, the media . . To feel alive, which he thinking he's a cold bomb, a calculating device, won't give him anywhere, because he's already ' dead ', his survival instincts and, needs to feel love, will drive him crazy and, into insanity, to avoid death and, obliteration . . The conflicts in his personality, that can be seen with a keen eye, if looked for, will drive him mad and, into a frenzy . . Deep down, he's just trying to survive, find love, before he dies . . But, because of his personality, that can't happen, it's impossible . . His doubt and, mechanical identity and, self, will never be able to find those things, not really . . The only place he will find meaning and, a sense of belonging, are among cruise missiles and, weapons . . There he will feel a sense of belonging and, comfort . . His home, the American military, especially expensive military hardware, like atomic sub-marines, nuclear naval carriers and, other advanced hardware and, technology, in the army . . All these things, will drive an ever greater need, to be around and, associate with these things . . And, whenever he fires a cruise missile, he'll feel alive, a bit more safe . . Because, by helping another cruise missile, he feels alive and, warm, as a machine . . When one of his ' own ' succeds ', he also succeeds a little bit, on it's behalf . . He will soon discover, the feeling of being alive, he's longing for, is strongest when ballistic or, guided missiles are flying . . And, here's the problem, that feeling only lasts as long, as the missile is in the air, on target . . When it blows up, he feels empty and, more miserable than before, when it hits, there's no more sense of him flying, because he's flying ' through ' it and, with it, on it's ' behalf ' . . . When it blows up, there's nothing but emptiness and, silent death . . Until he fires the next one or, the next one . . By the time he realizes how his personality works, it will be too late, impossible, to stop, almost entirely . . If, he realizes it, at all, he might not ever, do that . . So, what are we looking at, a man who will go to ever greater extremes and, challenges to feel alive and, survive . . Hollywood bores him, because the other actors can't keep up and, when he knows first hand he can beat all of them, almost, he'll leave because, it doens't make him feel alive. The feeling of incertainty, that something fascinating or, thrilling might happen, becomes turned into the feeling, that nothing new or, exciting will happen, he's seen it all, all the actors and, they don't impress or, scare him . . When he realizes that, he'll go looking for a bigger game, ' challenge ' . . That challenge, is Washington . . The people there are acting and, the stakes are a lot higher, global security, vast power . . And, the people there aren't acting or, lying, they're politicians . . So, in trying to convince them he'll find a bigger challenge, than Hollywood . . Convincing other world class liars and, entertainers, that you aren't lying or, dishonest, is a challenge, only a machine can mount or, a formidable and, incredible human being . . But, they all know they're lying and, it's for profit and, fame . . In Washington, they aren't lying and, the stakes are vastly higher . . So, when Hollywood and, global fame bores him and, doesn't give him a feeling of being alive and, ' flying ', he'll look for places, that might offer than excitement . . The only place that will ever happen, is in Washington, among the politicians and, power . . The amount of money, at stake in Washington, makes movie theaters seem utterly pathetic and, meaningless, they handle trillions, of dollars, every day . . And, if he makes a mistake, it could destabilize the country or, start a war, there he will find something, that on the surface, is more exciting than Hollywood . . But, it won't last long because, soon it will become an everyday chore or, task . . Because, if one thing is certain, we all know, politics are really boring and, taxing, long meeting and, boring discussions, over small matters or, issues . . He will find that the last place on earth, where he had hoped to find meaning and, love, doesn't contain it . . It's just some boring people, doing their job because, they have to and, pretend they care and, it's important, to them . . When he realizes that, the only way he can avoid ' feeling dead ' is, to see cruise missiles fly, in the sky, like family and, friends . . He will go to that extreme, to feel alive, feel ' important ' . . His chase, to avoid death, is only possible when, the bombs are falling and, raining, on people . . His only option, is to launch . .

The reason Tom Cruise always looks so smart and, intelligent on the screen, never really relying or, trusting on other people, isn't because he's wiser or, more clever . . He looks that way, because he doubts people, even Christ, as a doubting Thomas, until the end, when they finally prove they are Christ, with physical evidence, something that won't happen, anywhere, in Hollywood . . He can't be convinced or, otherwise controlled, because he automatically doubts all things, you say to him . . He's not super-intelligent or, wise, he just doubt everything, you might say, in advance, automatically . . Reliability, is the one thing he can't pretend, to have or, faith . . That makes him look questioning, insightful and, dramatic on screen, like he's always one step ahead, of the competition, in the movies but, it's because he goes on doubting them, for no reason, as a Thomas . . Having gone to Catholic school, Thomas Cruise Mapother almost certainly knows, that Thomas means ' doubt ', it's common knowledge, in many places . . When Jesus was resurrected, the disciple Thomas didn't believe he was real, even when he saw him, only when he put his hands, into Christ's wounds, did he finally believe . . So, Thomas Cruise won't likely find something to believe, in Hollywood . . It's all fake . . . So, he'll keep going, because of his doubt, in himself . . He won't stop, until he finally feels something, some relief, some mercy . . That can only happen, when the missiles claim the skies and, destroy everyone . . And, his life will eventually lead him there, into global politics . . Because, nowhere else satisfies or, ' completes ' him . . He'll keep running, until he dies, fades away . . Like, a bomb . . .

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Part 5 - - Constructive criticism, All The way - -

CRUZ : Does Tom Cruise know his name, Cruise has the same sound, as ' Cruz ' ? Probably yes, because he played against Penelope Cruz, a spanish global star, who's been in many movies and, films . . When he met her, he learnt his name meant cross, in spanish and, that even she could see through his ploys, when he hid behind the name and, made others feel ashamed and, little . . He knows he can get away with lying about it, to someone who knows spanish and, whose own name, is Cruz, pronounced Cruz, a global celebrity with, enormous power and, self-confidence . . He knows he can lie about, to almost anyone, especially those who don't know and, get away with it, when he wants, without getting seen or, ' caught ', for hiding or, masqerading, behind the cross, of Heaven . . He knows, his disguise and tricks work and, no one understands them, not fully . . Penelope was raised a Roman Catholic, born to working class-parents . . She would have been told or, learned what Cruz meant, in Spanish and, have told Tom Cruise, if he didn't know . . So, the last piece, to understand what he thinks he is, is that he thinks, he's the cross . . That explains his surprised and, wide-eyed looks, in the movies . . He thinks he's Jesus and, Heaven . . And, there's no lies or, sins in Heaven, a look of pure innocence and, faith, for the world . . As innocent and, pure as Jesus Christ, on a Sunday . . That's all his looks and, power in movies, revealed, in his names and, self-understanding . . He developed a whole new idea, of what it meant to be a ' Cruz ' Cruise, by being around her . . She showed him, by her example and, taught him, like a friend and, brother . . In names, they were siblings and, she taught him what Spanish Roman Catholicism meant and, to be real, because he was a ' Cruise ', like her, related, bonded . . She taught him everything, in act and, word . . And, he thought he was also Christ, in his expanding sense of self, in media . . He learnt, to be love, in that movie, from another star, Penelope Cruz, Roman Catholic . . He learnt, to feign the love, of Christ, in that movie, to ' be ' it . . He can look like Christ, floating in front of Heaven itself, once he learnt that and, with that power, can fool most people, if he wants but, he's still a cruise missile, a deadly bomb . . For, money . . . He found out the trick, to make himself appear like Jesus, in the sky, before Heaven and, sold it, on the cover, of the movie, in 2001 . . A vital step, on his way to power, as very few people can look at, or handle the face of Christ or, Heaven . . In Hollywood, a few people might suspect that trick, maybe people on cocaine or, drugs but, in Washington no one will see it coming and, believe it, buy the ' lie ' . . And, that will give him incredible power, a trick and, deceit he knew not even another super-star, a global celebrity, could see through, Penelope Cruz . . And, he was never scared of looking scarred or, broken in that movie, because if a Tomahawk Cruise missile gets a few dents and, scratches in the paint, it still works and, flies . . So, he never really felt any risk, which was one of the bigger reasons, we loved him in that movie, how can an American dare to look so weak or, hurt, with no health care or, support . . It's because, to a Cruise missile, a big scratch or, even a hole, in the side, won't stop it from completing it's mission, ' working ' . . He fooled the entire world, to loving him, with a trick, a deceit . . And, he learnt to feign, the love of Christ, to the world, on the cover . . And, whenever he needs to convince or, fool others, he knows that trick is waiting and, ready, he just has to think of himself not, as Tom, in that moment but, as the ' Cruz ' or, ' I'm Cruise ' . . People in Washington, will believe he's Jesus and, let him in, anywhere . . He's a perfect infiltration unit, a deadly Terminator . .

As a cruise missile, he has one flaw, that he wants to live . . When he realizes that, that it's a flaw, an error, in his code or, software, he'll kill us all, in nay way he can or, try . . His hanging on to sanity, is a ticking time-bomb, a disaster waiting to happen . . When he finally looks in the mirror and, realizes what he is . . He will do anything, to complete his mission, or purpose . . To fly in the sky and, explode . .

The reason they can point the camera at him, and it doesn't move him, is because he's a thing, a device . . It doesn't matter to a bomb or, a car if you film it or, interview it . . The media doesn't impress or, interest him . . It's just a place he goes, because he's good at it, it's fun . . When that seizes, he'll leave and, never miss it, not really . . The life he has, that people would kill and, torture for, means as little to him as it would, to a piece of metal or, a toaster . . He's utterly detached and, without remorse . . And, secretly he's bored with it, it's tedious to him . . He'd rather be flying in the sky and, killing people . . It's all a massive waste of time to him, his mission . . He finds everything in Hollywood boring and, absolutely lifeless, nothing appeals . . Because, to a mechanical things, a cruise missile, sitting in the middle of fame and, renown, power, money, sex, capitalism . . Means as little as, a small cloud, on the horizon, nothing, at all . . That's why he can look at the cameras and, smile . . It doesn't hurt him, he has no interest in it . . Just explosions and, going fast . . And, what he truly desires is to experience that feeling, over and, over, again . . As many times, as possible . . So, he'll come looking for it . . And, the only place he can find that, or come close, to it, is sitting in a bunker, beneath Washington, launching one atomic missile after, another, into the sky . .

He's magical in front of the camera, because he doesn't care, he's not even there . . He's a missile flying in the sky, a million miles and, cares away . . He can do anything he wants in front of the camera because, he's not really human . . Fundamentally, he thinks like a machine, detached . . And, acting no more strange or, difficult for him than, catching a fish or, driving a car . . To a machine, cameras and, fame mean nothing, no more than to a toaster or, a car . . That being said, he seems nice and, sweet . .

To him, the only thing that makes sense is, going fast and, blowing things up, high . . In hell, he finds heaven, faith and, solace . . The thing that's missing, that he can't give himself, is faith because he's a Thomas . . But, it exists, there are warm hearts and, true people, on the planet . . He just hasn't found them, because all people see him as a movie - star, not Tom Cruise, the man . . And, in that moment they give away, almost everybody, that they like fame, power and, wealth . . That it's enticing and, they can't be trusted, for money . . The career they've built, a tower of fame, is his undoing . . It prevents him from even meeting genuine, loving people, because he's so famous, everyone knows . . The industry, that destroys people and, hates them, has done it to him, too, for profits and, power . . By making him a star, they taken away his chance, of meeting sincerity and, faith almost entirely . . He will have to be extremely lucky, to find love, even if he leaves Hollywood . . Thinking he was the last person, that got some benefit or, something constructive out of Hollywood or, capitalism, he know realizes that America, might be completely evil because, he's seen the best of them and, they're all fake and, deceptive . . It's a social and, cultural problem, in America, that people don't love each other or, really care . . It's just a job, a business . . What he needs to do, is move to Holland, Brazil, France or, Canada . . And, leave it all behind and, never look back . . Because, the system he is under, is not working for him . . It's killing him, in reality . . In fully understanding that, he can also see what the solution is . . Take the money and, run, never come back and, travel the world to find the love, that heals him . . It's out there, waiting, in peace and, virtue . . In a forest, at a truck-stop, at some random diner, he will meet a waitress or, legal clerk, that looks at him the right way and, solves it . . But, he probably can't believe, him being the one that's made the most of America, that he has to leave, if he doesn't benefit from it and, he knows no one else does, what's the purpose, the claim . . Maybe that's one of things one does not have to understand, just act on and, close the door, for good . . A trap, with no hunter or, bait . . A vicious set-up . . .

Ha ha, Cool story, Did you like it, At all - -? I know it's damaging to Tom Cruise if it's true but, that's not possible, I just saw a picture of him, looking like a Terminator, on a page called Skynet something and, wanted to tell this story, I Hope it's Okay . . :) Anyway, he can just dismiss it as a story, that's all it is, after all, Thank you . .

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This is way too long to read in its current form. Shorten your story, and only keep the good bits. Also, read up on script formatting. This isn't a script, its a short story.

It comes off more as notes or a journal entry than anything else.
 
lol wouldn't it be funny, if Tom Cruise's acting Trick was, he just imagined he was a bomb, let loose - --$
 
lol wouldn't it be funny, if Tom Cruise's acting Trick was, he just imagined he was a bomb, let loose - --$

I think you should have posted this in the off topic forum, man. This thread category is more for people actually wanting real help with screenwriting.
 

directorik

IndieTalk's Resident Guru
Hi, so I decided to write a story but, I need help finishing it, I'm not that good, yet Ha ha

Please, Read it and, comment,
There's a lot here jbb. Before you can get help finishing it I think you
need to focus it. You repeat the same idea over and over and over.
You have what's called a character study rather than a story - a lot about
what he likes, what makes sense to him. And then a lot of explaining. But
there isn't much story. It's buried in there, but the story doesn't seem
important to you.

So now that you have all that out it's time to focus only on the story.
 
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