treatment 20 Word Treatment (Comedy)

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An internet game where we create a story in treatment form with 20 words per post, no back-to-back posting.

Genre: Comedy

Setting: Present day. Location TBD in story.

First person to post 20 words kicks it off!

 

[Nate North]

"have you ever seen army of darkness?" He asked excitedly, scanning the old lady's groceries at the register. She looked

 

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puzzled until she saw the back of her cereal box. "Oh.... ha, no, not my style really. I'm more of...

 

[Nate North]

a Downton Abbey Fan". "You'd love it!" He said. He lifted the scanner high and yelled "this is my boomstick"

 

[mlesemann]

She smiles indulgently. "But on Downton Abbey, Mary fucked a guy to death. That's some good shit!"
His jaw drops.

 

[Nate North]

Behind him, his shift manager Todd had been silently watching. "How many times do we have to talk about this"

 

[mlesemann]

She pinches Todd's cheek. "Sorry! I'm too old to be a cougar but a girl's gotta get her kicks somewhere."

 

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"Not too old to be a black widow!" He winks. "Be careful what you wish for!" she exclaims as she...

 

[mlesemann]

bats her eyelashes seductively. She peeks over each shoulder, then reaches into her oversized purse, and pulls out...

 

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a pen. She scribbles her number onto the receipt, crumples it, tosses it. "Fetch!" He fetches... "Good boy!" She exits.