Recent content by Unknown Screenwriter

  1. Finito

    I'm normally NOT a praying man but I'm praying for you, your family, and your neighbors... Stay SAFE.
  2. DRONE DOWN

    LOL. Loved the bear! Pretty sure I LAUGHED in ALL THE RIGHT PLACES! Good stuff. *EDIT: Loved your actors too! They were good!
  3. DRONE DOWN

    You're my HERO, Scoopicman!
  4. critique Dan's Shadow - a screenplay for review and feedback

    True... If the OP wrote this as practice to eventually kick it up a notch and write specs to sell to the market? Then yes... The overwriting should be eliminated. Same goes for the formatting although not a complete deal breaker... There are readers out there who would probably read no more than...
  5. critique Dan's Shadow - a screenplay for review and feedback

    I feel a little weird talking about @Ronen's screenplay without him (or her?) chiming in! LOL.
  6. critique Dan's Shadow - a screenplay for review and feedback

    I had the exact SAME thought and then, after I read the rest of it? I thought that MAYBE I was, in my own mind... Understanding it too literally. After I read the rest of it? I went back to that part and for some reason, opined that Dan was talking about being nasty and evil... He was tired of...
  7. critique Dan's Shadow - a screenplay for review and feedback

    I personally took SHADOW to mean the evil side of Dan... Based on the very end. I got the IDEA that Dan had very likely been into some nasty, evil shit and was afraid to face what he'd done in the past. So much so that he decided he'd be better off to simply kill himself. I also thought Diana...
  8. critique Dan's Shadow - a screenplay for review and feedback

    Read it very fast... Thought the dialogue was a bit clunky and ON-THE-NOSE but maybe that totally flies in Israel. I wouldn't know. I also thought the description was way overwritten but again... Since this is a short, that really doesn't matter if you're just going to make this yourself. The...
  9. crew Why is it so difficult to find collaborators for a project?

    Yup. Hey... Good luck on your projects! Nice to see someone still living the dream and I'm obviously NOT talking about making money... Making money is nice, don't me wrong but I'd rather be HAPPY doing what I love to do.
  10. crew Why is it so difficult to find collaborators for a project?

    Believe it or not? I think that's why MOST of US come here to Indietalk... LOL. Many of us have had experiences like mine above and it gets old. Sometimes you just want to talk film and unfortunately... Even with more and more people making films [sic] there doesn't seem to be a whole hell of a...
  11. crew Why is it so difficult to find collaborators for a project?

    I can only speculate as to why the organization never met again and fell apart... I think part of it was the IDEA that they would have to work on a film they weren't passionate about. Maybe they even thought by the time it was their turn? Nobody would be willing to work on their film. I say this...
  12. crew Why is it so difficult to find collaborators for a project?

    I can't really answer as to WHY people don't seem willing to go the extra mile when it comes to making a film but I can tell you what happened to me when I moved to New Mexico back in 2002. I had already come out here to scout things out. I'd heard and read that independent filmmaking was alive...
  13. misc Could Artificial Intelligence Help Write Your Next Script? This Creator Thinks So

    I LIKE how they're going about using AI to actually HELP writers instead of KICKING THEM TO THE CURB like Hollywood would prefer. LOL. Good article!
  14. screenplay The Saddest Painting

    By the way... I really like the idea/concept you have going on here. Would LOVE to finally see the finished work if you do decide to go for it.
  15. screenplay The Saddest Painting

    First of all? I LIKE the CONCEPT/IDEA you have here. Just think a lot of the dialogue is a little too ON-THE-NOSE. Which is fine for a first draft. And? I don't want you to necessarily use any of MY recommendations... This is YOUR project. But for instance... The very first bit of dialogue...
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