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    screenplay Any General critique

    Looking for general critiques
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    screenplay Is this something decent?

    First, thank you very much for responding. Sad to say, the upper case descriptions were an accident that I need to fix. Due to bad time management I was forced to write this quick.
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    screenplay Is this something decent?

    This is a first draft. I am really looking for general critiques on it. Thank you very much!!
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    critique Working on something new, Is it worth continuing?

    I do not mean to bother I am still green with screenwriting. Would I be following this if i added a scene on the next page where he remembers an event such as a car crash but create a scene of the crash.
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    critique Working on something new, Is it worth continuing?

    Thank you very much. This is very helpful, I appreciate this.
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    critique Working on something new, Is it worth continuing?

    Thank you for reading. Yes as it is there isn't much. The next page or 2 was when i planned on inserting some conflict.
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    critique Working on something new, Is it worth continuing?

    Thank you for reading. Yes I planned on inserting the conflict within the next page.
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    critique Working on something new, Is it worth continuing?

    This is a new project I recently started. I do not like it a lot, I don't hate it though. this is the first four pages and I am not sure how to feel about it. Certain things i'm likely to remove later. I do plan on rewriting this later. This is not the final product, its not even the complete...
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    screenplay Is my scene going well?

    Thank you very much!
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    screenplay Is my scene going well?

    thank you very much
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    screenplay Is my scene going well?

    I have changed this scene around and I know my last Two versions were pretty bad. I'm hoping this time the scene is decent. I recently made edits and I spent a huge chunk of time not looking at this scene because of school. I was having some fun on the last couple of lines. I am using this scene...
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    critique reworked a scene of mine, could i get an idea on its quality? 3 pages

    Scene is still being reworked and is not finished. My Formatting needs to be fixed but I wanted to get this on a page, I apologize for the formatting. This is my first scene/screenplay and I am trying to improve my storytelling.
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