I'm the opposite barnaclelapse. I find scripts much easier to write than prose. And more enjoyable, because you get into the heart of the story faster.
I am a multi-competition finalist/winning screenwriter managed by an LA rep. I have several comedic short scripts available either for an upfront fee or for credit if you've already produced. Contact me via kab@inbox.com. :haha:
Jed Camara - what a great name for a filmmaker! I really liked the fork scene but it was a tad too long. And the household implements were funny. But the way you described your little sister at the end - that's not nice! ;)
From a screenwriter's point of view, I liked the originality of the poetry. Also the use of colour in the past and B/W in the present. I just saw "Mulholland Drive" - something like that for the dream sequence would have made it a hell of a lot easier to understand. :)
I watched that cliche short Motorstorm and had a good laugh - especially at the phone voice-overs. As well as the alarm clock, there's the long look at oneself in the mirror and the explanatory language: "our mutual friend Fiona". Here's a great site about - well it's pretty obvious what...