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Yes I like that a lot. "Where" adds to the state of mind as if it is an alternate world/reality.

If you read mine again you can see where I changed the word, no biggie, it just adds to the dreamlike state imo.

Oh cool! I like it. I would just change the word and to where, so the dreamlike state (spiral) is more like a world. After losing a friend, an artist enters a dreamlike spiral, where she must confront the meaning of her own life to find a way forward.

Logline?

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Let me elaborate. "A man" tells us nothing. Is he a down-on-his-luck public defender? Is he a sanitation worker on disability? A college student during spring break? I'd like to know something about the MC. All I'm saying is, tell us.

I Featured this post.

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PS. Sounds like something I'd watch. 😁

Should this be "a" psychological battle? Also, blur seems counterintuitive here, "one terrifying truth" sounds absolute. Perhaps terrifying could change to unimaginable. A bit more ominous. ...he spirals into a psychological battle where guilt, identity, and reality blur into the unimaginable...

I'd help you out too if I was available. Maybe next time @CelticRambler and I can join.

Tell us more about the MC: An introverted young man... wakes up in: awakens in... Tell us more about the motel: a cheap motel... and no memory: with no memory... I could keep going but my point is, tell us more without using a lot of words and try to maintain a nice flow.

Delegation of power is your savior.

Mystery solved! 🤣