Hi, thank you so much for the feedback!
These 10 pages are from a redraft, which is why the grammar still needs a fix up.
Will definitely change the we see and we hear to make it read more immersively.
Have not seen playing God. Read the premise on Wikipedia. Sorry to sound so ignorant, but...
Yes, Lawrence, Fox and Professor are all the same.
I think I know how to fix the discussion with Mary. I'll take the award showing in the beginning of the scene out and ramp up her anger, more drama better conflict.
I'll fix up and explain the diseases. I guess why they're not explained is...
This is the first short film script I've ever written. It's the first draft. Initially I did a zeroth draft and then built on it.
Logline: A brilliant but egocentric neurologist is told he has one last chance to improve his bedside manner or face termination.
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