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Ah gotya, will do. And thank you!

Hi, thank you so much for the feedback! These 10 pages are from a redraft, which is why the grammar still needs a fix up. Will definitely change the we see and we hear to make it read more immersively. Have not seen playing God. Read the premise on Wikipedia. Sorry to sound so ignorant, but...

Still working on it. What'd you think of it?

Title: Bypass Genre: Crime/Dramedy Logline: After randomly saving the life of an aspiring mobster, an unlicensed doctor is thrust into criminal medicine.

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I shelved this script a week ago. But now I realize how weird and incomplete everything was. Planning is something I still definitely have to improve on Thank you for the feedback.

Got it, thanks.

Yes, Lawrence, Fox and Professor are all the same. I think I know how to fix the discussion with Mary. I'll take the award showing in the beginning of the scene out and ramp up her anger, more drama better conflict. I'll fix up and explain the diseases. I guess why they're not explained is...

Thank you

Yeah that part with the head is redundant lol. Thank you

Got it

Hi everyone. This is the first short film script I've ever written. It's the first draft. Initially I did a zeroth draft and then built on it. Logline: A brilliant but egocentric neurologist is told he has one last chance to improve his bedside manner or face termination. Page count: 11 It's...

New to screenwriting and filmmaking. Hope to do something cool with it sometime in the future.