I really liked this. Found it to be very touching.
The final 20 seconds or so went a bit overboard, I reckon, when all the "I love you" comments dircetd at the camera bust out.
Aside from that, I think it's awesome. (I'm assuming you're going to fix up all that audio, etc, that is)
Tonight, the night after watching your film, I happened to watch a nice little documentary about Finnish men and their spas.
Steam of Life.
Yup, who woulda thought?
Unfortunately, looks like it's not available for streaming. Anyway, I felt like it shared a lot of qualities with your film. It too takes a confessional approach, and it too has what I would consider to be a quarky closing. At the end, the filmmakers have the film's participants singing a song to the camera. That song singing, as far as I caught, is not, or it hardly is set-up.
But it works.
I don't really have a point, I guess, other than this. I still think that I feel that the I love yous are a little disjointed in that I feel maybe they're not set-up as much as I might prefer. But on the other hand, having just watched Steam of Life with its closing that felt strikingly like your closing, in a way, I'd say that it's given me new eyes with which to view your closing...maybe I'm warming up to it. Not that that's either here or there or your concern. That would be wrong. =P
Good luck in post and your next film already in progress.
=)
Thanks and I would've loved you to do the sound design on this too! Unfortunately, I am cashless...
I think the short won't be powerful enough because I don't have enough understanding of sound to really power through the changes. I have some ideas - 'heartbeats' in a couple of places, stereo effects, crowd noises, silence etc... but these are just random tinkering.
And as a note, we have already shot a trailer for another short with a little fighting in as an experiment for the next 'full' short. It's tricky - really tricky to make it real but I'm working on it.
Okay, gave it a look! Very touching, and a great concept. The dancing shots were really great, and I like the intimate "speaking to the camera" approach. I too would have liked some shots of the singer at a theater; the paparazzi scene didn't seem to work all that week, for me anyway. Did seem a bit on the long side, but I'm not sure it'll feel that way once you get some music in place. A bit more set-up for the ending would have been good, but I got where you were going with it as it is.
As a musician, I did find it odd that the singer talked about the fans and approval, but not about the actual music itself.
Overall, I enjoyed the film very much! Good first effort!
What shutter speed did you shoot the bikes at?