First of all, I would like to say that I really appreciate the help I've gotten here and I already feel my logline has improved dramatically as a result. I would like to say THANK YOU VERY MUCH.
on my most recent update of the logline.
'An aimless college graduate spends his last day in town with two high school friends, before leaving to join the family business, retreating from the harsh realities of the adult world dreaming of adventure and escape.'
I left out any mention of drugs because I guess I was giving people the impression that it's like that 'White Castle' movie. I'm fine with abandoning the stoned/drug angle. The above sentence definitely needs to be tightened up. I going to take some more stabs at it in a bit.
Here's where I am at with the film. I have a 87 minute cut with mixed sound and a finished film score, but parts of the film really are not working. I'm going to spend the summer re-cutting the film. This is my first film and I actually spent time thinking it out but I've never sold anything or marketed anything before. I've been working on this for 2 years so it's hard to sum up in a sentence. I'm also sick of it and at times can't stand thinking about it because I just want to move on, but there is SO much more work ahead of me.
This is a rough synopsis of the film that a friend wrote, but I really don't like it but it provides some info. I think it sounds cheesy.
'Early on a Sunday morning, Johnny pounds on the front door of his friends, Sid and Natalie. He’s frantic: “I need to use your phone!” It is his last day in town, his phone is already disconnected, and he’s desperate to get the call he has been waiting for from the comic book company he hopes will hire him and put him on the path to his creative goals. If he doesn’t get the call, he’ll be forced to cow-tow to his parents’ wishes and move to Utah to suffer a soul-crushing job in his uncle’s paint factory.
So begins the story of an anxious day in the life of three young adults wrestling with dreams and responsibilities, love and lust, euphoria and paranoia. Waiting for the crucial call, the trio begin to regale each other with their various experiences in the adult world: Johnny suffers the daily humiliations of serving an aging and eccentric novelist; Sid can’t keep a job, even a good one; Natalie, the perpetual over-achiever, chides them both on their shortcomings and can’t help sharing her various schemes for success. As each of their stories evolves, we come to learn of the utter dysfunction of Sid and Natalie’s co-dependent relationship, the crush Johnny has harbored for Natalie ever since high school, and the deep-seated fears of both Johnny and Sid reflected in the hallucinations brought on by their repeated boredom-induced bong-hits.
As the day draws on, Johnny begins to accept the inevitable: with nothing left to lose, he attempts to confront Natalie about his feelings; examine the career demands and expectations his parents have laid on him and he has accepted up to this point. Whether he decides to go to Utah or not, one thing has become crystal clear – he must face his future alone.'