hey guys.
so this is something I'm working on and I couldn't choose between these two, and i couldn't resist spoiling the story a bit:
- A psychedelic adventure of a drug-dealer father whose daughter is kidnapped after nightmares of white lions.
OR
-A drug dealer has to cope with problems of being a single father and manage his reoccurring nightmares about white lions wanting his child.
here's a link to the first 4 pages of the script. would you want to read more of it? does it spark interest?
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1PEJ801FrMUE2Ms86yQiQGhr3oYT32jMz/view?usp=sharing
It is a psychedelic and gothic story about a single father who is a part of a drug smuggling small gang who sells in the subways. He starts to see hallucinations of white statues of lions, chasing him and repeatedly telling him to "return the child". Confused by these messages and dreams, he starts taking some sleeping pills.Little by little, he uses more dosages of sleep medications. One night while he is asleep, his phone rings and the voice messages are from his co-workers, telling him to run away and that they had been caught. He doesn't wake up, and the next morning the child is gone. Next morning, he finds a a note that has an address on it, signed simply Lion. He immediately faints and goes to sleep. The lions appear again, this time they are covering his infant's empty crib, and the rest is black. He sees the lions jumping to the side, and the scene changes. He sees himself standing in a doorway, and a room where a woman is looking at herself in the mirror. The child is playing on the ground. The lions suddenly attack and seem to bite the child and eat their prey. Although the child's physical form is unchanged, he starts crying, gradually louder until he is screaming. That is when the mother picks her up, scattering the group of lions. The animals -staring into the camera- are suddenly aware of the man's presence, and run toward him. He wakes up. He takes the last box he was selling to the address. When he arrives to the meeting, right after a car pulls up close by, he hears her daughter screaming. The lions suddenly fill the streets, white and golden colors blurring the view, and the man is struck by a sudden wave of madness. He starts battling the gunmen to try to reach the voice and to scare the lions. He is shot, and in the closing image, we see from the child's point of view. She reaches her hand curiously to grab the lions face, and it is immediately tamed.
I'm a total beginner so all tips, critique and comments appreciated. Thanks for your time!
so this is something I'm working on and I couldn't choose between these two, and i couldn't resist spoiling the story a bit:
- A psychedelic adventure of a drug-dealer father whose daughter is kidnapped after nightmares of white lions.
OR
-A drug dealer has to cope with problems of being a single father and manage his reoccurring nightmares about white lions wanting his child.
here's a link to the first 4 pages of the script. would you want to read more of it? does it spark interest?
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1PEJ801FrMUE2Ms86yQiQGhr3oYT32jMz/view?usp=sharing
It is a psychedelic and gothic story about a single father who is a part of a drug smuggling small gang who sells in the subways. He starts to see hallucinations of white statues of lions, chasing him and repeatedly telling him to "return the child". Confused by these messages and dreams, he starts taking some sleeping pills.Little by little, he uses more dosages of sleep medications. One night while he is asleep, his phone rings and the voice messages are from his co-workers, telling him to run away and that they had been caught. He doesn't wake up, and the next morning the child is gone. Next morning, he finds a a note that has an address on it, signed simply Lion. He immediately faints and goes to sleep. The lions appear again, this time they are covering his infant's empty crib, and the rest is black. He sees the lions jumping to the side, and the scene changes. He sees himself standing in a doorway, and a room where a woman is looking at herself in the mirror. The child is playing on the ground. The lions suddenly attack and seem to bite the child and eat their prey. Although the child's physical form is unchanged, he starts crying, gradually louder until he is screaming. That is when the mother picks her up, scattering the group of lions. The animals -staring into the camera- are suddenly aware of the man's presence, and run toward him. He wakes up. He takes the last box he was selling to the address. When he arrives to the meeting, right after a car pulls up close by, he hears her daughter screaming. The lions suddenly fill the streets, white and golden colors blurring the view, and the man is struck by a sudden wave of madness. He starts battling the gunmen to try to reach the voice and to scare the lions. He is shot, and in the closing image, we see from the child's point of view. She reaches her hand curiously to grab the lions face, and it is immediately tamed.
I'm a total beginner so all tips, critique and comments appreciated. Thanks for your time!
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