What do you think of my scene?

[RealJasonBourne]

A guy ESSAI is standing on a corner of a block. He looks around and then looks at his watch. A few seconds later a guy JORDAN starts walking towards him.

Essai nods to him.

JORDAN
Whats good

ESSAI
not much, how are you

Jordan doesnt respond and stares.

JORDAN
Pff..

Jordan flicks his cigarette past essais head. Essai stares at him.

ESSAI
Never seen you smoke before.

JORDAN
How much

ESSAI
$20 a sack, like last time

JORDAN
how much you GOT?

ESSAI
don't worry man, I've got you covered

JORDAN
Show me

ESSAI
Money first man

JORDAN
SHOW ME punk bitch

ESSAI
calm down man. Whats with the tough guy act.

Jordan stares at him. Essai turns his head slowly and sees a car behind him waiting by the curb. He turns around and looks at Jordan.

ESSAI
alright chill, I'll show you.

Essai pulls out a bag from his backpack, then throws the backpack in jordans face and begins to run.


*insert death sentence alley chase scene*


This is really supposed to be for practice and I want to use the same style of cinematography that breaking bad would use.

Do you think it's decent or is it complete hogwash

 

[Sage Pictures]

I thought it was quite good.
On the chase scene - plan it out ahead of the shoot and see what you can't accomplish. I bet you can do a great scene if you set your mind to it.