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DaRuler0000

DaRuler0000

This my first"attempt" at a film. And before everyone starts drowning me with comments that is no help to making better, I know I'm a beginner. It has a funny story and hopefully I can get some constructive criticism along the way. Thanks for watching in advance.
Link: http://youtu.be/kpRgQyv3zik
 
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'Grats on finishing your first film. Gotta start somewhere, right?

The subtitles mention the unscripted parts - that would be the first thing to make sure you have done, before shooting the next one. Improvising and shooting on the fly will only give you a headache in the editing room, unless you have a lot of experience. Figure out your story fully, then write a shotlist of what you need to shoot (it's essentially a checklist for everyone, to ensure you don't forget to film anything you need)... and do the next one! :D

What's the biggest thing you learned from this?

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Welcome to IndieTalk! Congrats on finishing your first film. :)

I like the idea. It was cute, funny, & entertaining.

Not bad! Although I think it would have been nice if you had cut out all of the titles in the beginning, and just started the film, first showing the "haunted daughter" speaking, then eventually moving to get the snacks, then the climax of the film. You could end with some quick credits, or perhaps keep the ONE title in the beginning, but the text throughout interrupts the pacing of what could be a potentially interesting story. It drags on because of that, and if there was more actual content and story being shown instead of text explaining revelations and plot-points, I think the overall video would have been significantly more enjoyable. The lighting and audio could have been better as well. There are plenty of tips on Youtube channels such as Film Riot and IndyMogul that explain how to do certain techniques on a low budget. For starters, I can tell you that pointing some lamps, work lights, clamp lights (actually, pretty much any type of light) in the direction of the subject will get a nicer looking image.

If you'd like the find some filmmaking sites, you can visit this link:

http://www.indietalk.com/showthread.php?t=50686

(plenty of filmmaking links to sites and books from me and others)
 
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