I'm new here, and this is one of my first shorts, have a look. Constructive Criticism is always welcome by me.
http://youtu.be/VGsW0IWRtEI
Thanks for watching!
http://youtu.be/VGsW0IWRtEI
Thanks for watching!
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40 mins?! holy crap.. Well, lets see how long I hold my attention in front of a computer. I bet it won't be longer than 10 mins at the max.
1. Ditch the intro titles. I don't know who these people are. Too long.
2. Dialog is a bit corny and unnatural. ut that's ok. I'll keep going. I like the sound! I CAN HEAR THE ACTORS!
3. Is.. is that a naked dude?? HAHA nice
4. Thats a cool show room! nice lighting. The bag lloks like a camera pouch.
5. lol nice reference to San Tsu.
6. HAHAHA these ninjas are hillarious!
7. You need to speed up action fight scenes. Drop frames maybe? Also sound design for punch sounds.....
Lol explosion..
Okay, thats as far as I've got. The time I watched it is... 7 minutes! My theory was correct.. Don't make short movies for internet longer than 10 minutes! Very few succeeded
So far my favorite thing was the dialog sound and lighting. Not bad. COuld use some work but better than 90% of youtube films i've seen.
I didn't like the pacing of the story. Too slow. The fight scenes too quiet and slow as well. I understand you were going for a parody, but it wasn't my type of humor.
Good job, and sorry could watch the whole thing. Can't do it!
boring intro, but looks nice... but for a project like this, i would move it all to the end instead.. you need to grab people early. and this will buy you 1-2 mins more of viewing...
silver car, first on the parking lot.. there's a colour thing on the left hood.
hillarious sun tzu comment...
if the action acting is supposed to be like that, fair enough.. but damn it's lacking in the first few fights...
well bar fight is also really bad... again, if that's the parody it's supposed to be, it's not really funny... actually just bad..
but the serving girl... damn she's cute...
hehe the deep voice on the hero, is kinda interesting...
with the speed the guy is introduced, after the 17 min mark, i kinda felt that the climax was about to hit...
and of course giving away his bike... wow was that a jump cut i just saw? just before he got shot.... ewww..
haha nice reveal...
is it two episodes in one? nope... just 20+ mins of black screen...
you know, you probably turn off more people with the 46 min video, than you would with a 20 min video...
anyways, that was my running commentary..
as to the end, i was just like... meh... it would have been better if she had shown him who she was earlier and just stabbed him in that tender moment...
nice enough movie... great looking footage.. sound was quite good.... the combat was horrendous though..