archived-videos THE WAKE 5 Minute Short Film :)

[EthanStorm]

Hey guys. Hope all you film folk are doing well

So, after much deliberation I've finally had the courage to put my first 5 minute short film online. If you see this as an attempt to plug myself and gain some kind of exposure then, well, you wouldn't be entirely wrong. But I am also here to receive any tips, observations or feedback on how to make my work going forward better and of a higher standard. And I trust there are some people here who are able to give me insights that could help me achieve that

I encountered many challenges working on this project and also learnt countless lessons about my art form. But I am proud to be sharing it here with all of you

We were given the brief of creating a film that is the introduction to a video game, but I took more as making a film that is open ended, beginning a much larger journey for the protagonist.

As you know, each film we make is a little piece of ourselves so please, be gentle haha

I hope you all enjoy!

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=0osha9KP_vs

 

[Murdock]

The "voice" was a bit much for me. To me, having a more gentle voice lends some ambiguity as to whether the voice is benevolent or malevolent. Think of HAL from 2001. Just a thought.

At 00:26 you gave a lot away by showing the guy unconscious on the gurney. Maybe go directly to the beach from the door opening.

Over all the acting seemed a bit stiff. For instance at 01:40 I would have expected more desperation.

At 03:28, it seems there could have been something more he could have said, to drive the story than,"She's a fucking liar." You know, those incomplete sets of facts that create more questions than they answer.

There were some focusing issue. IDK if you did it on purpose for an effect, but it's noticeable.

I liked the music. It was a little loud/overwhelming at times but appropriate for the scene.