No the challenge is to distill the story.Fair enough, but then you'd have to find something to add to the story?
Cool, thanks. I'll think about all that for the next oneOkay so my favorite shot was at 1:43
Do you think you could make that shot happen 10 seconds sooner? 20? Surely you can cut a half a second here and there.
Lets take a look shall we. Your movie doesnt even start for 23 seconds. TWENTY THREE lol
we already saw the title. we already saw the thumbnail. play the movie for petes sake.
the tv shot is overexposed. you could have made the TV bright green and then chroma key in the image and it would look absolutely perfect
or light differently so that theres not such a problem with your dynamic range
anyway lets move on - SIX SECONDS of her thumbs on a controller. Youre that fascinated by her hands? six seconds is an eternity.
Unless its fast action I dont like going below 2 second cuts personally, i think its disorienting. So I would say cut out 4 seconds here. Just 2 seconds of the hands on the controller.
I like dark stylized lighting but having half her face in shadow, and the other half in static light does not sell the illusion that she is in front of a television. the light should be dancing across her face if the tv is on. also for the "mask face" person the light is coming from the right side and on the "girl face" the light is all coming from the left side. it doesnt seem to match yet they're supposed to be in the same location
Lets do a count shall we - How many times do we see a close up of these two before the 1:43 (my favorite shot) eight times.
You cut back and forth between them eight times before we get to my favorite shot. Maybe we can get to this shot faster if you challenge yourself.
Okay done for now