script critique

bird · Sep 23, 2004

Would anyone be interested in critiquing the first 50 pages of my script?

NicklausLouis · Sep 23, 2004

I'd be happy to help out, email me at:

pokewowplayer1@hotmail.com

Poke

SPaulovich · Sep 23, 2004

Changed email link

I'll give it a read and pass back a critique.

BUS125 · Sep 23, 2004

continuepunx@aol.com throw it my way.

bird · Sep 23, 2004

Poke, Steve, Christdrinkspee,

Thanks for responding to my post. I emailed you all the first 40 pages. I usually work on an old typewriter so I had to re-type it in wordpad and that was as far as I got. Once again, thank you.

bird

Zensteve · Sep 24, 2004

I usually work on an old typewriter so I had to re-type it in wordpad

Pssst... It's 2004, now. :secret:

bird · Sep 24, 2004

Pssst...it's 2004, now

But I got a brand new cartridge! I'm also using Win98, a washboard to do the laundry, and fetching water from the 'crek' for my monthly bath :eek:

bird · Oct 4, 2004

Yes, I know I made another big scene, but I would really like some CONSTRUCTIVE criticism from you guys. I won't have a meltdown-promise (I'm taking my meds). I'm not sure if this is too soon to ask (if you've finished reading it)as I've never submitted pages to a forum before. Thanks in advance.

bird · Oct 20, 2004

C'mon...I'm begging.

Zensteve · Oct 21, 2004

I'd be happy to read it, once the ITOOFC settles down. (About a week, I would think)

Will Vincent · Oct 21, 2004

bird: send 'er my way.. I've got time to read it.. will@intensitymedia.org

SPaulovich · Oct 21, 2004

Bird, I gave it a couple of read-throughs. I just finished a thorough reading and will send along my critique shortly.

Nice work, hope I'll get to read the whole thing at some point - I want to see how the story develops.

bensmerglia · Oct 21, 2004

idk if you're still looking for people to see this, but if you are, id like to see it. email: bensmerglia@hotmail.com

i just finished an entire script for a short film, so this is something im interested in, thanks

bird · Oct 21, 2004

Zensteve,

Didn't think you were talking to me :blush:

. I know you're busy with the competition but can I have your email and I'll send my work. Whenever you can get around to reading it- it would be much appreciated! Thanks.

Will,

Thanks! Am sending it out to you.

Steve,

Once again, thank you for taking the time to read and critique my work. I (truly) look forward to hearing what you have to say to help me improve the piece. I continue to work on it and will forward the complete piece when done.

bird · Oct 21, 2004

Bensmerglia,

Thanks! I am sending you the w-i-p. Congrats on the completion of your script! Are you going to be shooting it soon?

bird · Nov 18, 2004

Thank you Steve P. for your invaluable critique of my script

. I'm already busy making the changes you've suggested!

NicklausLouis · Nov 19, 2004

Bird ... I'm sorry that I have not responded ... I must have skipped over this thread a time or two because I never was aware that you sent it to me ... I just checked my Hotmail account and it is not there ... can you please resend it?

Poke

bird · Nov 19, 2004

Thanks Poke, sent it!

bird · Dec 28, 2004

I apologize if this appears self-serving, but my thread is coming dangerously close to leaping onto page 2. :scared:

Therefore I must *bump*. I still am very much interested in more feedback. (I've revised and added more pages) Thanks!

T Shipley · Dec 29, 2004

Hi Bird,

I'd be happy to read it. I'm off this week and just about done with mine ((literally have about half a page to go), so send it along and I'll look at it.

tomship1@excite.com