screenplay Screenplay of action scene

[krishnasarma]

After a while, I am working on a short film (action genre). I have never wrote anything on these lines before. Any suggestions/reviews please.

Yeah, with a quick glance, it has lengthy descriptions. I am working on that too.

 

[Nate North]

It's not bad! I think there are some good beats in here, and I think you are on a good track with showing the protagonist get exhausted during the fight. It makes it more human and interesting than the standard action star with limitless energy. I'm not a technical scriptwriter, so maybe others can give you more feedback on those aspects.

 

[krishnasarma]

Slightly improved version.