archived-videos new to filmmaking could use tips and feedback

[schneidstain]

Hey everyone! I wanted to know what you guys thought of the first thing ive ever filmed and edited! Any tips on how to improve or any comments good or bad about it would be great! Thanks! https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=OUQtlz9SiHg

 

[GuerrillaAngel]

A spelling error 10 seconds in. Not a good sign. Quit watching at that point.

 

[sfoster]

I'm assuming it was intentionally silly? if thats the case good job because I did laugh at the acting couple times in the beginning.

in your final shot..

1) i can see the cameraman's reflection in the store windows..
2) the other dude stares RIGHT into the camera at the end..