New Feature Film Idea

[benllben]

Hey guys, the following idea is for a possible feature film i may possibly produce. It is based very loosely around things currently happening in my life, which is actually were i got this idea from. I want to know if the idea is any good, and if it would be worth producing.

I also would like to know if it should be a short movie or feature length (40+ mins). I was leaning towards Feature just to have the time to get the audience emotionally attached at the beginning. Then there would be plenty of time for many different scenes in the main part of the movie. Generally Longer short movies dont go down to well, and i would like to enter into a film competition.

Anyway here is the idea, let me know what you think..

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The story starts off with two best fiends, one being male the other female. They are having such a great time together as they always do, but the day is growing old and they eventually must split. Several days lapse before the male decides to contact his friend again, despite his efforts, several days pass without response. He begins to become agitated and upset, realizing this is unusual for his friend.

Two weeks pass, and he has still had no luck contacting his female friend, nor has anyone else he has spoken to. Suddenly one night while sleeping he receives a call... From his bed he reaches over and answers his phone answering it to the plea for help from his female friend.

The struggle is now on to rescue his friend, he will not give up and will do anything to protect her.

 

[rayw]

Cheers.

 

[thevision]

I will continue the movie ( teenage movie)

Ben shows the faded piece of paper to the pretty counter girl

BEN
Her name was jen, she was here last night

counter girl
sir we have plenty of people her last night

BEN
yer but she was special

he crouches in his nees and sits back on local black chair

the counter girl sees his concern

COUNTER GIRL
(to ben)
so you really liked her huh?

ben lays back on counter chair dissapointed with his head back, not eyese to the counter girl just dissapointed his eyes in the air

BEN
yES ... I really liked her

Counter girl looks at him with a smile shes cute herself good looking girl with read hair

Counter girl
Okay I will check again

Ben with his head back on the chair says nothing

close up we see the counter girl work ont he computer bring up couple of names then look ofer to ben in a sigh

COUNTER
Well there is two

BEN sits up

BEN
two is all i need

COUNTER
well its a big two ones in russia ones in new york

BEN
(excited)
NEW YORK, NEW YORK.

COUNTER GIRL looks again

COUNTER GIRL
this would be the JEN daughter of the new york mayor?

BEN GULPS

BEN
oh yep thats the one

 

[thevision]

Counter girl
Well I have her checked out this morning

Ben
that early

counter girl
(confused)
Do you no this girl, we can't just give out information?

I strides himself on the counter

BEN
oh yer we go way back

counter girl
way back i'm sure?

Counter girl (cont'd)
Well she checked in as jordian joans news agency
does that mean anything?

Ben holding his arm on the counter wanting the details responds with confidence

BEn
yep thats the one

COUNTER GIRL
so womens bra line professionals?


BEn
oh yes she told me all a about it

counter girl
(looks at the computer confused)

Ben
she loves avon

Counter girl
Yer right

she hands him Jenna's father number that checked in.

Ben takes the number flicks it up

Ben
(to counter girl)
thankyou

as he springs out the door

Bens out the front of a high class hotel with no money but a phone and rings a cab, but no recepection he whistles down a cab

cab slows down and he drops in

INT. inside cab
BEN
New york

CABBIE
Okay (looking at ben strange)

 

[thevision]

INT. INSIDE CAB
we see ben open the little leflet damaged by the (philipino cleaner) rubs it
he rubs it on his leg trying to get the number clear,

BEN
(to himself)
god damn it

they pass a few streets , he calls to the cabbie

 

[thevision]

are we going the right way close up the cabbie is

TAXIE DRIVER (Zach Galifianakis)
oh yer we totally are

we see the cabbie crab out of the cab compartment , you how you doing baby, yer ill be home soon

BEN
excuse me i'm in the back here

cabbie
excuse me i'm taking an important call

BEN
important call, in the middle of the freeway?

Cabbie
respect the cab man

BEn
what the fuck? i need to get to new york

Cabbie on the phone
whats so special about new york is it special - to you huh?

 

[SamThomson]

Good idea. Simple, and has been done before in many different ways. As a 20 minute short it could be amazing. Try putting an action spin onto. Make the viewer believe it's a friendship into romance, but surprise them with action and exciting scenes halfway through it.

 

[thevision]

Cab driver (Zach Galifianakis)
I dont think you respect the cab driver. you no a cab driver does hundred miles of day.

He brings out his pet white mouse on his shoulder, ignoring ben

Cab driver
(to the mouse)
yes he doesn't understand does he no - give the mouse a kiss

we see ben in back of the cab concerned

BEN
(to cab driver)
okay you got som serious problems - drop me of at nex t stop

cab driver
no next stop is far far away, you have to pay for next stop.

BEN
I paid for the cab

Cab driver
not for next stop , or after that (give the mouse a kiss ) give me a kiss

Ben drops his hand in disbelieve

BEN
(to cabbie)
You need help

Cabbie
I'm not the one in the back (cabbie farts)

Ben
Oh you can't be serious.

Cabbie looks at his mouse and blames it on him even though it was him

Cabbie
Did you just do a boo boo.

Ben in back of cab
opens the back of window

and coffs out back window

close up cabbie with the mous

Cabbie
(to mouse)
naughty boo boo.

Ben in back is annoyed
Ben
Your sick

Cabbie
he make a boo boo hes he did

Ben in the back concerend

Ben
Boo boo.

as we see the cabbie pu the mouse on seat next to him ans swing the steering weel aroung

Ben
oh shit...

Cabbie
Bad boo boo

Close up the mouse wistles its mouth

Back of the seat

Ben
Oh shit...

Cabbie..
You want to know bad boo bo.

Ben
No .. no bad boo bo..

Cabbie
yes bad boo boo.

He brings out a cigar out of his glove departmant as the cars swinging around and he nods to his little mouuse

Cabbie
good boo boo

he lights his smoke

as close up

Big truck goes to hit them as we here a big beap of a truck coming towards them beep.

EXT. outside cab car

High veiw we see the back end of the cab car jus miss a truck.
and do a three sixty.


INT. cab car

the car stops swinging , cabbie smokes on his cigar.

and turns and talks to ben

Cabbie
So whats your thoughts on cabbies today

he then takes a drag then gives a drag close up to the mouse

Ben lights his hed back freaten from what just happend

BEN
(to himself)
shit

cabbi
Just what I thought

as he gives the mouse another smoke of his cigar.

He turns around to Ben and talks

CABBIE
well were here

as ben looks across he relises hes right near a big double story apartment
linked to jen from the previous resort he had scene here.

BEN
where here?

cabbie sucking on his cigar
Cabbie
yer of course.

No extra charge/

ben stumbles out the cab

EXT. outside infront of Jens big resort (connected to her rich dad)

Ben steps out of cap looks up turns back to the cab

BEN
(To cabbie)
thanks

(O.S)
cabbie drives off smokin his smoke
speadin off ..

cabbie.
as we see the cabbie speed off almost hit into other cars.

close up we see ben look at his card of hen then look up to the big story rich unit where she must bee he hums to himself

then takes a breath

comedy part here ill work this into a script ect. ha ha thats pretty funny, both actors from hangover is actors im thinkin from this feature

 

[thevision]

Lets make the girl he likes rich, he stand out the front and rings after the cabbie drives off

he stands and rings but gets an answering message

he looks at the phone.

He tries again looks up to her unit but not response he then calls down another cab

jumps in and goes off in a cab

INT. REPORTER CENTRAL

his job is a reporter we see him flipping threw pages and newspaper adds

I am still keeping with your story here so this is your part here

He looks at her faded name, ( but knows her unit address)
He calls but just get a message bank

Several days lapse before the male decides to contact his friend again, despite his efforts, several days pass without response. He begins to become agitated and upset, realizing this is unusual for his friend.

 

[thevision]

Goin to bed now but , think you have a feature there with the two hangover guys

cheers

 

[benllben]

Thank's for all your input everyone.
Rayw is right though, Thevision, That script would not be possible for me, however thanks for taking the time to right it. I didn't expect to get so much help this fast...
I think perhaps i will settle on a short movie, perhaps 15-20 minutes of length. I do already have all of the sound equipment (Ntg-2, Boompole, H4n) and video camera so that isn't an issue.
The biggest problem i actually see is having the right actors for the task, and people who can do a decent job at it. I will keep you updated as i work on the ideas and start on a script.