I don't mean this to be cruel, but having read your last several shorts, they're all very dull. I've seen improvement in your formatting but there is a lack of dramatic sense. Quoting
Justin Morrow's article:
"Most spec screenplays do not pass the reader. From time to time, my friend would send me some of the more out there scripts he read, along with his dumbfounded coverage, and both were always amazing to me.
It seemed that most of these potential movies had been designed by writers with a sort of narrative tone deafness, an insensitivity to story, or even how people talked to each other; this, combined with a lack of awareness of their deficiencies ... led to pages of contraction-less, expository dialogue about what was going on on-screen."
Seriously, read books on story. Syd Field, Robert McKee, Blake Snyder et al. give excellent examples of how you should approach story and plot in screenwriting. Especially in a short, page one is the deal breaker. Your stories seem to lead with dull, broken characters which lack energy and distinctiveness. The first page is like the start to the rollercoaster. If you don't get the momentum going quickly, you don't leave the gate. In this story, NO ENERGY waitress meets NO ENERGY man to sit in NO ENERGY restaurant until a NO ENERGY sick guy enters. There is a NO ENERGY conversation about toast. So by page 3 of 9--a third of the way through your short--there's NO ENERGY .
DRAMA is ENERGY. I'm not saying this to be overly critical. I've seen you improve in other areas but plot and story ARE the screenplay. You need significant improvement in these areas. You may have a cool idea; but if you lose the interest of the audience, it becomes a moot point.