Heh, watched it last night.
Watched it again just now. Sound was off (no dialogue, and the music was just filler) for a better look at the edit.
Pacing was flat. Not terrible; just unvarying, both in duration & content. Smoker in new location, lights up, gets a puff, guard arrives, moves on. Repeat.
Now, there's nothing wrong with repetition but there still needs to be change along the way. Comedy in threes, an escalation of pace, an unexpected change of direction, etc. Something that allows repetition, but alters it so it's no longer the same.
A simple way to have done this could have been by incrementally decreasing the duratation of each "bust", and adding several more locations (each shorter than the previous) and having the guard eventually be at the locations before our heroic smoker does. Smoker realises the futility of his actions and takes his lumps at that gazebo-thing. That's just an example; I hope you get the idea, though.
I've no idea how that fits into the greater documentary-thing you're doing, though. I'm thinking more slapstick.
As is, though, you've got all the shots you needed and it's put together well enough to tell what it's sayin'. It doesn't fail at all. An audience can follow it with no problem. It works. Much better than my first film, too.
Why's it sepia tone, btw?
So what's the rest of it all about?
